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Old 04-29-2013, 01:44 AM   #1
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Somewhere, she mistook
me for a good example
and followed me home
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Old 05-07-2013, 01:23 PM   #2
So-Called New-Age(d) Poet
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Oh you and your tiny, one phrase poems...!

I missed you posting in here. This was very much you. I'm just pretty sure this could be syntactically altered to give it a bigger punch. This is because the point of this is that she mistook you for a good example, and you finish with what doesn't matter that much (when it's such a small thing like this). However I can't alter it without making it sound weird. Plus, it's your tiny poem and it's what you do best, so I'll leave it to your opinion.

Stick around !
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