12-30-2012, 08:53 PM
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5c3n3 p0w3r
Join Date: Nov 2008
Location: Austin
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Bored On My Favorite Holiday
We just laid there and watched the sky
her looking for the beauty in every star me too scared to breathe because it might set her off and ruin the new year |
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01-02-2013, 01:51 PM
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So-Called New-Age(d) Poet
Join Date: Aug 2007
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It's been a while since I've read something from you. This was nice; I just think that "set her off" isn't quite what you were looking for, or at least doesn't have as much impact as it should.
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