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Old 04-15-2009, 05:04 PM   #1
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Writer of The Month - March - Carmel

Real Name: Carmel

Age: 26

Location: Tel Aviv, Israel

Favourite Artists: Change on a daily basis. Today is an Elliot Smith day.

Favourite poet/poem (published writer): Changes daily. Today I like this Ė

Drunk as drunk on turpentine
From your open kisses,
Your wet body wedged
Between my wet body and the strake
Of our boat that is made of flowers,
Feasted, we guide it - our fingers
Like tallows adorned with yellow metal -
Over the sky's hot rim,
The day's last breath in our sails.

Pinned by the sun between solstice
And equinox, drowsy and tangled together
We drifted for months and woke
With the bitter taste of land on our lips,
Eyelids all sticky, and we longed for lime
And the sound of a rope
Lowering a bucket down its well. Then,
We came by night to the Fortunate Isles,
And lay like fish
Under the net of our kisses.


(P. Neruda)

Why do you write? Because good words unwritten are good words wasted.

Favourite word(s): Northern.

Favourite technique/style to write in: Rhyme schemes, free verse.

What do you do especially, to find inspiration: Love.

Your most recent work and reason behind it: Found a piece of paper with the draft of a little speech I wrote for my momís memorial. Made me remember stuff about the years we spent in hospitals.

Tips for newer writers: Write original, because you are.

Whatís your goal in writing: The goal is writing.

Final comments or thoughts: Thank you.

Picture: As if.


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Old 04-15-2009, 05:12 PM   #2
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Sweet. Noticed your name in it and had to click. XD
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Old 04-15-2009, 05:19 PM   #3
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elliott smith days are always the best days. congrats.
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Old 04-15-2009, 05:20 PM   #4
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Favourite word(s): Northern.

I remember this one



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What do you do especially, to find inspiration: Love.

<3

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Old 04-15-2009, 05:46 PM   #5
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I guess this means I'll have to go back and read your stuff this month, it must be real good! Congrats, you've always been one of my favourites to read.
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Old 04-15-2009, 07:28 PM   #6
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Old 04-15-2009, 07:50 PM   #7
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Old 04-15-2009, 07:55 PM   #8
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Old 04-15-2009, 08:14 PM   #9
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Old 04-15-2009, 08:55 PM   #10
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Old 04-15-2009, 08:56 PM   #11
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love that neruda poem by the way, one of my faves of his.
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Old 04-15-2009, 09:06 PM   #12
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Old 04-15-2009, 09:09 PM   #13
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Old 04-15-2009, 09:40 PM   #14
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Old 04-16-2009, 12:03 AM   #15
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Great job, girl frand.
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Old 04-16-2009, 12:48 AM   #16
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congrats.

Everytime you post three pieces in a month, you deserve at least a chance to win. This was a good month to win with .
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Old 04-16-2009, 05:17 AM   #17
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Old 04-16-2009, 07:08 AM   #18
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I've been waiting for someone to include some Neruda in one of these. Congrats.
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Old 04-16-2009, 04:10 PM   #19
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Carmel is Zombie Mary.
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Old 04-16-2009, 05:24 PM   #20
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Neruda is one of my favorite poets as well, didn't know there were so many fans here.
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