05-22-2009, 10:26 AM
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Join Date: Aug 2007
Location: That 60 mile gap between Newcastle and Scotland that no one cares about
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Lie To Me [WIP]
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Been a while since I've tried to write lyrics so input would be greatly appreciated. Got some music to go with the lyrics as well and this is as far as I've got with the music as well.
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Lyrics: Hello My Friend Lie To Me Last edited by Wednesday Bass : 05-22-2009 at 11:30 AM. |
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05-22-2009, 10:43 PM
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Join Date: Oct 2008
Location: Connecticut, USA
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REALLY really like the chorus! First verse is pretty good, verse two is great also. Great work so far! Are you going to add anything to it? Mind checking out mine too? I'm such a bad critic, I'm sorry... It's hard to describe things that need to be changed for me, but for 95% of the time I really liked it! I'd be interested in hearing the music with it too.
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05-23-2009, 06:09 PM
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Join Date: Apr 2008
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as stated
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05-23-2009, 06:16 PM
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Join Date: Mar 2007
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I think the "truth in my nightmares line" of the chorus feels a little out of place, and it would flow alot better if you made the "And destroy my trust in you" part of the first verse if you made it all one line. Didn't find much wrong with this; I thought it was great and yes, the chorus was catchy!
 If you want to check out a song I'm working on: http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1130454 |
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05-24-2009, 10:29 PM
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Join Date: Nov 2008
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i like it man ... its really nice
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