Go Back   UG Community @ Ultimate-Guitar.Com > Music > Recordings > Tabs & Chords
User Name  
Password
Search:

Reply
Old 10-18-2009, 05:36 PM   #1
TheReverend724
another hit, barry bonds
 
TheReverend724's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2006
Location: Dr. Pepper FLAVOR ZONE
You Never Knew - Alternative (GP5)

I've never posted here before, but please give me some feedback (both positive and negative is fine)

Name: You Never Knew


thanks
Attached Files
File Type: gp5 youknow1.gp5 (76.0 KB, 65 views)
__________________
Quote:
Originally Posted by blake1221
Dylan, I believe at this point, you've listened to all the music. Congratulations, you win one Chuck E Cheese token and a balloon.

TheReverend724 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 10-18-2009, 05:41 PM   #2
Momentosis
Defiler
 
Momentosis's Avatar
 
Join Date: May 2007
Location: Rocation:
As expected from a drummer, quality drumwork there.


Has a very pop-punkish vibe imo.

Probably due t the basic structure and with power chords really driving the song.

Not a bad thing at all though as some people like to think.



Nice lil riff for the intro though.
__________________
:3
ಠ_ಠ
show

┐( ̄ー ̄)┌
Quote:
Originally Posted by skylerjames13
you suck their dicks and make them feel good so that they don't rage

>﹏<
Watch me play games.
(۳ ˚Д˚)۳
>jay
Momentosis is online now   Reply With Quote
Old 10-18-2009, 06:41 PM   #3
21Fretter
Registered User
 
Join Date: Jul 2007
The intro was a bit weird for me. At bar 3 i expected a shift to the A# on the G# string. Maybe I've heard too much pop-punk music but i expected that progression.

When you just stop with the clean at bar 16 it was a bit sudden for me. Maybe try a progression of single notes following the rhythm's progression (that build up) just to fill the void.

Didn't like the notes used for the clean guitar at 31.

At bars 39 and 40, maybe change the rhythm to straight forwards 8ths through out the bar. I think it would work better with that idea you've created of building up to the big chorus (not sure if it's the chorus but ja).

The "chorus" is simply awesome. That change from 50 to 51 is beyond awesome. There is just something about it.

Didn't like the transition from bar 57 to 58 but i removed bar 59 and it just flowed a lot better for me. I just felt like a quick change was better suited after that bar 57 rif***e if you know what i mean.

98 - 105 was great. I really liked that change in strumming pattern at 102, worked very nicely.

Transition in 114 was good. Fits awesomely.

I think you can completely remove 138 - 141. To me it serves no purpose. Going straight into 142 from 137 would work so better to me.

142 - 159: I don't feel it fulfills the epic ending feel. Maybe think of using the rif***e from 98 - 105 instead.

I think this is a very solid piece. Not generic and you've got the catchy powerful awesome chorus!

Last edited by 21Fretter : 10-18-2009 at 06:42 PM.
21Fretter is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 10-18-2009, 06:50 PM   #4
TheReverend724
another hit, barry bonds
 
TheReverend724's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2006
Location: Dr. Pepper FLAVOR ZONE
wow! thanks dude

I never expected such great criticism
__________________
Quote:
Originally Posted by blake1221
Dylan, I believe at this point, you've listened to all the music. Congratulations, you win one Chuck E Cheese token and a balloon.

TheReverend724 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 10-18-2009, 07:03 PM   #5
21Fretter
Registered User
 
Join Date: Jul 2007
It's just the thought that i would like people to go into as much detail as possible to help me get my piece the best it can be if i ever get around to posting something

It also increases the chance of me hearing a recording of it one day
21Fretter is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 10-18-2009, 07:23 PM   #6
herby190
slaps basses and faces.
 
herby190's Avatar
 
Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Eau Claire, Wisconsin
Could you export it to GP4 for I can hear it?

If you don't know how, it's File>Export>Guitar Pro 4 Format
herby190 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 10-18-2009, 08:09 PM   #7
TheReverend724
another hit, barry bonds
 
TheReverend724's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2006
Location: Dr. Pepper FLAVOR ZONE
here herb
Attached Files
File Type: gp4 youknow12.gp4 (45.6 KB, 20 views)
__________________
Quote:
Originally Posted by blake1221
Dylan, I believe at this point, you've listened to all the music. Congratulations, you win one Chuck E Cheese token and a balloon.

TheReverend724 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 10-18-2009, 08:24 PM   #8
piratemetalhead
madjurstic
 
piratemetalhead's Avatar
 
Join Date: May 2007
Location: The Shaolin Slums
Reminded of Blink 182's better stuff. Sounds pretty professional and well-done, and I loved that little synth melody in Bar 41, and that breakdown-ish part near the end sounded great as well

C4c pl0x?

http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1217721
__________________
Last.fm
piratemetalhead is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 10-18-2009, 08:25 PM   #9
herby190
slaps basses and faces.
 
herby190's Avatar
 
Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Eau Claire, Wisconsin
I really liked it, although it really needs a bass track earlier in the song; let me know if you need help writing one, I could help you out, seeing as bass is my primary instrument.

C4C? The link is in my sig.
herby190 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 10-18-2009, 08:29 PM   #10
TheReverend724
another hit, barry bonds
 
TheReverend724's Avatar
 
Join Date: Feb 2006
Location: Dr. Pepper FLAVOR ZONE
What is C4C? Comment for comment? Critique for critique?
__________________
Quote:
Originally Posted by blake1221
Dylan, I believe at this point, you've listened to all the music. Congratulations, you win one Chuck E Cheese token and a balloon.

TheReverend724 is offline   Reply With Quote
Old 10-18-2009, 08:39 PM   #11
herby190
slaps basses and faces.
 
herby190's Avatar
 
Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Eau Claire, Wisconsin
Critique for Critique would be the literal way of translating it over, yeah.
herby190 is offline   Reply With Quote
Reply


Thread Tools Rate This Thread
Rate This Thread:

Posting Rules
You may not post new threads
You may not post replies
You may not post attachments
You may not edit your posts

vB code is On
Smilies are On
[IMG] code is On
HTML code is Off
Forum Jump



All times are GMT -4. The time now is 08:45 AM.

Forum Archives / About / Terms of Use / Advertise / Contact / Ultimate-Guitar.Com © 2014
Powered by: vBulletin Version 3.0.9
Copyright ©2000 - 2014, Jelsoft Enterprises Ltd.