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Old 09-01-2014, 01:49 PM   #1
highgear
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some lyrics i came up with

Lookin through your window
Starting to feel strange
I know everything about you
You don't know my name

Watch you from a distance
You don't know I exist
I've become a creeper
Some may say obsessed

Lookin through your window
I watch you get dressed
I was with you on vacation
Friday night out with friends

Hold onto the memories
The details you will share
Mine are all imaginary
I was never there

Will you ever notice
I been watching you
Will you ever see me
Through the lens I view you
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Old 09-01-2014, 01:53 PM   #2
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It sounds kinda like a more graphic/sleazy version of Iris by GooGoo Dolls. I like it
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Old 09-01-2014, 01:57 PM   #3
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Graphic and sleazy is good! Thanks.
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Old 09-01-2014, 03:44 PM   #4
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I can dig it!
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Old 09-01-2014, 03:48 PM   #5
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these are some sweet lines alright!
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Old 09-01-2014, 04:03 PM   #6
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Thanks for all the compliments.
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Old 09-01-2014, 05:30 PM   #7
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Maybe I will compose some riffs make an mp3...
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Old 09-02-2014, 06:43 AM   #8
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Nicely written and I like the style of writing. I have read the poem with a style of rap and I think the style well suits the song that you written.
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Old 09-06-2014, 03:30 AM   #9
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Yes as of heatherpatton said the lyrics will be suitable for the rap style of background score and not for the melody and pop so, if you try to use the rap style of music means then it will be good to hear the song.
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Old 09-10-2014, 04:59 AM   #10
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i love the fourth stanza... "I was never there" is so unexpected. Nice!
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Old 09-18-2014, 05:04 AM   #11
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I can feel the song, there is some flow between each line, I think you are having good creative skills. I really like your lyrics. You can improve a lot...
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Old 09-23-2014, 04:23 AM   #12
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Nice. The first line "Looking through your window" I loved a lot.
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Old 09-28-2014, 03:22 PM   #13
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Pretty good! Continue with that
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Old Yesterday, 04:07 PM   #14
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Good lyrics and story, I like the final stanza and the line "through the lens I view you"... Keep it up, would be interesting to hear you put these into a song with instruments
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