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Old 01-29-2010, 01:22 AM   #1
XxSensesFailxXx
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Never Ending Nightmare (rough draft)

hey guys this my first song that ive actually wrote out... it kinda sucks i mean i wrote in like a few mins =p just put the lyrics down as they came..

This is a metalcore/screamo like song if you've heard the song Friends Are Friends For Never by Greeley Estates.. thats how this will sound.. going from fast paced screams to low growls during the parts in capitals =p



OH!

Your past has caught up with you
No where to hide no where to run
THE SUN BEATS DOWN ON YOUU!
You wish you could take back your past
in hopes of escaping this NIGHTMARE!!

(breakdown)
GET DOWN ON YOUR KNEES AND PRAY FOR FORGIVENESS
GET DOWN ON YOUR KNEES AND PRAY FOR IT TO END
GET DOWN ON YOUR KNEES AND PRAY FOR FORGIVENESS
GET DOWN ON YOUR KNEES AND PRAY FOR IT ALL TO END


The ones you've hurt
The ones you've abused
They'll come back,come back to get YOU!!
you sleep at night with your eyes open
your heart beats,your body sweats
you know its coming!,,,,BUT WHEN?@@!?
Here comes your past its..

(breakdown)
COME BACK TO GET YOU!!
PULL YOU UNDER THE SEA, NEVER TO WAKE LIKE A NEVER ENDING ENDING NIGHTMARE!
DONT YOU WISH YOU WERE DEAD?!?

DONT WORRY BABY YOU'LL BE GONE SOON ENOUGH!!

You cant find the surface,, your lost at sea
You cant catch a breath,YOU CANT ESCAPE THIS!!
Its got you by the leg
and your going UNDER!

(breakdown)
Your life flashes before your eyes,the crys,the pain,the suffering,x2 (GROWL SECOND TIME THOUGH)
They all come at you like a never ending night-MAREEEEE
You cant escape whats coming for you.
Try and run,,ill be there to cut you down
Try and escape and they'll be there to CUT YOU DOWNNNN!



Are you happy with yourself?
Are you satifised with your choices?
Now your life is about to end and your choices forged in stone
Its ok keep telling your self you will wake up bbbbabby!
Dont worry it will be over soon enough.. BABBY!!

(breakdown)
THE SHADOWS ARE COMING FOR YOUUUUUUUUUUUU!x5 (back and forth between screams and growls)




yea its kinda lame i know but u can tell im kinda angry at an ex... also im going to do the vocals and make a guitar part seperate then put them together see how it sounds..hmp i tried btw i know i need to work on the structure but this is a rough cut..

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Old 01-29-2010, 01:38 AM   #2
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Well, I hate your genre, but the lyrics fit perfectly haha. The music wouldn't be so bad if there wasn't 4 breakdowns a song haha.
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Old 01-29-2010, 01:44 AM   #3
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lol i love the genre but the breakdowns get excessive i actually didnt mean to add the breakdown in the middle of the song...but all well...

theres 3 then =p
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Old 01-29-2010, 04:49 AM   #4
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Wonderfully brutal. Just reading this makes me wan't to stab something repeatedly. Thumbs up considering this is a screamo/metalcore song.
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Old 01-29-2010, 01:24 PM   #5
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hey thanks for the feedback..the lyrics whet a bit dark..was kinda angry

but the sound of the song will be metalcore..even if the lyrics seem for death metal =p
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