champayne

Hey guys. Been a while since I posted anything on Tabs and Chords. Anyway, I really like where this song is going. Its a work in progress, but its still a good 3 minutes long. The final version will probably be much longer. I decided to take the symphonic road, but its still mostly guitar work. Anyway, enjoy. Constructive criticism is welcome and I'll C4C if you post a link.

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atira

First of all: good drums.

Okay, I don't have time, I have to go to sleep so I'll check back later.
But I worked on your intro.
You started off with a nice melody in the first bar then you started repeating it for 18 bars. My ears expected a continuation of the melody and it was not pleasant hearing a repetition.
Furthermore every other instrument moves downwards then back upwards while synth 1 (the melody) keeps playing the same, creating a not very pleasant dissonance (at least for my ears).
So I changed Synth 1, take a look at it. If you don't like it, scrap it.

Also: I see that right guitar plays a third compared to the left guitar which is okay if you want to do that, it's a matter of taste. But G is very dissonant here, use G# (I already did that, check it). You're playing in F# minor and G is a chromatic sound here.

This is it so far, I'll check back later.

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champayne

It was meant to be kind of a starting point, where I developed the other parts from there. I didn't really want itself to progress that much. But I like what you're doing. I might consider that. Thanks for the crit!

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Ometh

Good job, the drumming is pretty cool, the riffing is also really good and the keyboards really give a good atmosphere. Can't wait to see the final version! C4C? http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1296017

Squares

I enjoy this immensely.

the melody at 35 needs to be more ... showcased. You know? brought to the front of the wall of sound you build.

the constant powerchords can get boring, but vocals would fix that.

change at 51 is a bit abrupt for this song.

after that, you should have some REALLY quiet strings behind...oh wait. there they are.

Same Old Stuff: It really is.

haha. i like your construction site. Currently it sounds like a trainwreck. lol


I think the intro was the most impressive part so far.
Fix your transitions, and add a bit more sustinence where needed. This IS symphonic metal after all. You've got an orchestra, use it :P


Mind checking out mine?
http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...26#post23699626

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champayne

I left you two nice, fresh crits on your songs.




I guess the symphonic metal part is a bit of an overstatement. It is meant as an atmospheric background. But I'll try harder to incorporate that, but I don't currently have a (working) keyboard. Its kinda hard for me cause I write it on my guitar.

About the solo, I know it sucks right now. I should have removed it before posting the song. I think I'll scrap it completely. I'll write a better solo once I final decide to replace the 1st string on my guitar .

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Some of My Recent Songs

Synthetic Damage WIP

The Nightman Awakens

Into the Sunset WIP

Frost

The Butter Knife Massacre

Into The Sparta Pit

Untitled Tech Thing