defiance64

This is the central thread to find all of the content that I currently accept Critiques and Critique back for:

What Happened That Night

• Investigating the Crime (2011)
• The Originality Blueprint (2012)

  • [01] Main Streams and Generic Rivers
  • [03] Explore, Explore
  • [06] I Didn't Really Name This Song...

Left Untold

• Remind Me...What's a Smile? (2015)
• Infrastructure (2018)
• Mostly Me (2021)

  • [01] The Count to Infinity
  • [02] Perfect Attendance
  • [07] My Eyes Are Bleeding
  • [12] Reach Out and Touch Me
  • [13] Down This Road Again
  • [17] Mostly Me

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bassburton

This is quite good man. I really like the 1-3-7 chords in the beginning. I tend to use them a bit myself too. I'd lvoe to see the fninshed song. The main riff at bar 34 is done quite well too. The piano section provided a good build up to the full on riff. The drum n' bass ection could really evolve into something later in the song if you ask me. Like some sort of bridge.The little "chorus" riff at the end also added quite nicely to the main riff. That could really work as a chorus.

C4C?http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1315081

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frankibo

It's decent enough metalcore, the chords give it a post hardcore vibe which makes it seem less generic which is good. Like the piano part a lot.
The first riff is either 4 bars of 3/4 or 6/8 or 2 bars of 6/4 or 12/8 depending on how you wanna write it. It's not 4/4 though.

defiance64

That is the least important thing to me. The song itself is what matters most. But that's just my opinion

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salamander121

Pretty decent song so far man, you certainly make the stereotypes of metalcore a lot more interesting.

The intro has a great chord progression and actually sounds more post-hardcore than metalcore but it all moulds into the next parts so well - the piano part.
You really blend it nicely into this softer part that still acts as a sort of "Intro pt. 2". Like said above you do have a few time sig errors but thats no real biggy if your just using this for reference in recording.
Bars 34+ don't really cut it for me. It's round about here that you seem to lose the creativity you had in the past two sections and dive into easy-to-write metalcore riffs. This part, however, should be okay as long as you continue to weave this post-hardcore thing you have going in with the metalcore style. The results should be interesting.

8/10 so far. No need to return a crit.

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frankibo

Well it just helps if you have songs in the right time signatures. It makes writing drum parts a lot easier and more to the point it's just the correct way to write it.
And i don't care much for your opinion if you don't care for mine.

defiance64

See everyone on this forum takes what everyone says out of context. I didn't mean to come off as rude and not caring about your opinion. I was just stating that I would much rather have the song tabbed, but you assume I meant to be b-word-y. Not to sound b-word-y with this, but I'm not asking for you to critique my opinions. I'm asking about the song. People need to grow up. I've been here for over 3 years and people seem to get riled up (and wanting to get riled up) about the most irrelevant things. Take the flamethrowers elsewhere.

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