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Old 06-17-2010, 02:23 AM   #21
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That chorus in fall from grace would fit so well on an epica song :P
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Old 06-20-2010, 02:59 AM   #22
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Lol awesome, well the first song I chose was Enter the Asylum, since I called my band Within the Asylum and I love dissonant music, I couldn't help myself.

Very ambient and eerie intro, it doesn't drag on to the ear but it makes itself want to be listened further, and when you heard that background distorted guitar you know you're about to get punched in the face and you're just cringing, waaaaaiting.... it's really awesome, I love the tension.

BOOM ENTER THE ASYLUM

I'm going nuts.

Oh wait the drugs are kicking in, life is pretty... spaced... out... woah.

Awesome man the mood for this song really kicks ass =D.

My type of music, definitely, it's what I would consider true artistic expression in music, even on guitar pro it sounds wonderful and conveys emotion. Well done.

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Old 06-24-2010, 07:34 PM   #23
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I, too, listened to Enter the Asylum. I really enjoyed the creepy atmosphere that you set with it, it provided a vivid picture in my mind of some kind of asylum thing, and it sounds perfect for a horror movie. You did a great job layering all the instruments progressively and I completely loved it up until the third bar of the build up where the harmonizing comes in. I understand it's supposed to be dissonant, but that just didn't sound good at all to me. Afterward, when you Enter the Asylum, it just sounded completely off track. I still didn't appreciate the dissonant harmonies all too much, the synth sounded unnecessary, (perhaps a guitar solo/noodling would be better in its place?) and the blast beats came in at an awkward time (maybe if you had them the whole time you're "in the asylum"?)

Anyway, I don't listen to (or like, really) metalcore, which seems to be your prominent genre, (which is why I didn't review your other pieces, so I wouldn't be prejudicial) so maybe that breakdown thing would be welcome in the metalcore community, but it's just not my cup o' tea. However, I did enjoy the rest of the song quite a bit.
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Old 06-25-2010, 04:25 AM   #24
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Anyway, I don't listen to (or like, really) metalcore, which seems to be your prominent genre, (which is why I didn't review your other pieces, so I wouldn't be prejudicial) so maybe that breakdown thing would be welcome in the metalcore community, but it's just not my cup o' tea. However, I did enjoy the rest of the song quite a bit.


Thanks for the crit, you made some helpful points.

And there are some songs there that lack metalcore influences completely like Abyss and The Sun Will Rise (Or whatever i called it, it's something like that) but I can see why you left the others alone, I'd rather you just did that then left me an abusive "I hate metalcore" comment about my songs haha.

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Old 06-25-2010, 05:19 AM   #25
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Thanks for the crit, you made some helpful points.

And there are some songs there that lack metalcore influences completely like Abyss and The Sun Will Rise (Or whatever i called it, it's something like that) but I can see why you left the others alone, I'd rather you just did that then left me an abusive "I hate metalcore" comment about my songs haha.

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Nah, I don't have anything I'm really confident with putting up here yet, but I'll check those other songs out in a bit, and glad I could help.
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Old 06-26-2010, 12:43 AM   #26
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Okay, I listened to The Sun Will Rise so here's my thoughts on it piece by piece:

Intro: Pretty good, definitely sounds like pop-rock.

Verse: Still doing a good job of covering the pop-rock genre, very similar to the Intro so not much more to say.

Chorus: Much more powerful than the verse but still keeps the general feel of the song. The strings really do a good job of making the chorus sound as strong as it is.

Verse: The little solo here is a little dry. I understand this genre isn't really known for its complex guitar solos, but it does seem like you could have gotten a little more creative with it.

Chorus: Still as powerful as before, but the pianos bring it out a little more.

Break: Nice soft section, it does a good job of contrasting with the chorus before it, but after its first four bars, when all the other instruments come in, it sounds a little sudden, maybe having them fade in or just one at a time come in or something.

Bridge: Does a nice job of bringing the energy back up for the last chorus.

Chorus: I like how you started it quietly, but have all the other instruments jump in at once for a nice, powerful final chorus.

Overall, pretty good pop-rock song. Mostly they're lyrics-driven, so it's not all too easy to score this without that, but I guess I'd give it an 8/10.
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Old 06-30-2010, 02:55 PM   #27
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Thanks for the crit.

I'm sure there are people I've C4C who haven't gave me a crit.
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Old 07-14-2010, 04:04 PM   #28
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Wow there are loads of songs :P lets do this.


Abyss:It has a really evil sound going on, everything seems to flow really nice, the drums are simple but tight and the ending is epic. 7.8/10


Apologise: I didn't hear the song yet, but the tittle is lame :P let's see if the song is too.Wow definitly too much major chords going on :P Not really my style, but I can still tell that it has quality. But not really something I would hear for fun. 6.2/10


Fall From Grace: Nice tittle. You used the midi seashore sound really cleverly (does this word exists?). It sounds really interesting and intriguing...I would no doubt listen to this for fun. Drums are perfect, I wish I had this drum writting skill. The calm part is really nice and the part that follows fits perfectly, even though it's a little unexpected. Overall 8.7/10


Enter the Asylum: Interesting tittle and intro. After a while this kind of sound starts to get boring. I would shorten it out a little bit. The entry of the rythm guitar is refreshing but I would expect the weird sounding melodie of the lead guitar would stop when the drums came in. I would avoid using so much of this kind of weird sounding, it's nice in low doses, use too much and you'll get tired of it. Overall: 7/10

Empires: This will be my last one for now, I have stuff to do. Let's start, nice intro, drums are really nice. The melodie is nice and interesting. The bass is perfect. The heavy part is nice, although I'm not a really big fan of metalcore. The chorus is pretty cool. The breakdown flows perfectly. The other breakdown is too metalcorish for me :b. Overall : 7.5/10
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Old 07-15-2010, 06:37 AM   #29
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Just listened to post rock... brilliant.

I'll post a crit in a while.

thank you for writing that, there is still hope for those of us who come to this forum and don't listen to metal.
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Old 07-15-2010, 11:22 AM   #30
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Listening to post rock

Intro- great post rock intro flows well

Leads- the leads are great over it...im really feeling relaxed...a truly amazing post rock song so far

A little more layered strumming- i like the building up of layers, couldve used a different guitar sound for strumming...personal preference...i just don't like the clean guitar that much

Wow...the synth run is amazing

here comes act 4....wow that hit the right spot...love it

Act V...good progression...again with the clean guitar

ACT 7...ahh some distortion in...i was waiting for some of that

Act 8 is also great...distortion comes in perfectly...feels like the climax of the song possibly

Act 10...can def tell we are getting near the end...that little part around 360 caught me off guard...the end synth is great

Man that was incredible...I am usually hesitant to spend 20 minutes listening to a guitar pro track but that was very worth it...I say record it now as well as most of the other songs you have posted. Thanks for that...everything was spot on.
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Old 07-15-2010, 01:07 PM   #31
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Critting "Open Book" as I listen through for the first time.

Intro: Wow, a bit of a sudden intro; kinda hard to get into. (I came back, and changed the bassline to fingerpicked, for the sake of the RSE; I take back what I said, this actually flows decently)

Breakdown: This section was okay, but not really memorable.

Chorus: Feels a bit awkward; I might be wrong, but I think it has to do with the bassline. (After changing to fingerpicked, I feel it flowed a lot better; I take back my complaints again. )

Verse: I like this part, except I feel like some of the higher bass parts don't work so well; then again, it may just be because I don't like GP5s RSE for a picked bass.

Reintro: Again, it's just the bassline that seems off to me....

I feel like there should probably be a bit more of a transition between the chorus and verses....

Verse: All the extra stuff on the hi-hats and stuff just made it feel choppy....

Bridge (a): I thought this was cool.

Bridge (b): Nothing to say here, really.

Breakdown: Nothing really memorable here.... Maybe it's just because it's a genre I'm not into, but I can't say I liked this part.

Outro: Feels very sudden, and I don't feel it resolves the song very well.

I mostly just don't like the breakdowns; then again, I never really have been into them, in most contexts.

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Old 07-15-2010, 02:41 PM   #32
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@Herby,
Thanks for the crit, i'll get back to you with a crit in a moment.
I have to say that most of your complaints (apart from the breakdown complaints) can be resolved by not listening in RSE (because without carefully choosing the effects and then mixing it sounds TERRIBLE) or by me actually recording it.
Also i noticed i've actually put some wrong notes in the bassline by accident so i'll need to change them.
And i just listened in RSE and it sounds goddamn awful, listen in midi maybe and see if you feel differently about any of the parts?
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Old 07-21-2010, 05:37 PM   #33
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Thanks for saying it's good, any chance of getting the actual crit though?
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Old 07-23-2010, 12:55 PM   #34
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Critting "The Sun Will Rise".

The intro gets it off to a good start; however that might be a bit early for a chorus.

In the verse, I feel like it works better if you change the bassline to straight eighth notes. For example, in the arpeggios rooted at the open note, have it come back down and play the nine again, instead of stopping at the twelve. Try using some similar ideas for the rest of the arpeggios, and I feel like it could add a little bit more movement to it. Other than that, I like the verse.

I also like this chorus; however, you really need to put a crash cymbal on the first note of the Break. Also, do the same with the first note of the chorus that follows the bridge.

I also like the feel of the ending.

Overall, it's a pretty good song, but there's definitely some room for improvement.

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Old 08-06-2010, 03:16 PM   #35
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Alright I'm not going to crit post rock at this point in time, but the part,The Summit sounds a bit like the progression from Ecstasy of Gold, Ennio Moricone, which is awesome

Anyways I'm going to crit Empires because I like metalcore

Alright I love the intro, it really gets your attention. all the parts, drums, bass, second guitar come in nicely, and fit nicely

My only problem is the transition to the Intro. It's not bad, but I don't like it going into chugging, it just doesn't fit IMO

As for the intro itself it's pretty generic, but I don't mind generic at all. the chugging is really good, and the lead fits nicely over it. I like it

The verse is good everything is fine here

I'm not sure about the prechorus. once again more generic metal core, but this time it's boring and it doesn't get you excited for the chorus. maybe add some rhythm instead of just straight sixteenths?

The chorus is also good. does it's job and a good transition into the breakdown.

This is pretty good breakdown I like the harmonics, keeps interesting. I don't like transition into the clean chorus, it's too sudden. perhaps a properly done transition from the breakdown instead of nothing, a power chord would work. Or maybe something a little more interesting

As for the clean chorus I like the chord rhythms and it transitions well into the distortion, which I also like the rhythm guitar. Overall a great section of the song

The transition into the breakdown is such awesome build up. I love it, it gets you so pumped up for the breakdown.

This breakdown is good too, but you really do need a real bass drop to make it work. But a good breakdown nonetheless. The effects give it a good atmosphere.

Haha I love the siren, so sick This Reintro is really epic and leads into the breakdown quite nicely

This breakdown fit very well, and I like the little outro bar in the end. Is this song going to lead into anything? just a little curious

Overall the song is really good, but a few parts need to be fixed. I can see it being an awesome song to see live.

7.5/10

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Old 08-15-2010, 07:09 AM   #36
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Old 08-16-2010, 11:32 AM   #37
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I listened to Post Rock, Intro was very enjoyable, and nice listening throughout Act I.

Act II, good chords, Nice lead over the top, and a good layered sound. Act III was great, although the Lead Jazz guitar is kind of getting annoying.

From there, it repeated the same elements used earlier untill Act IV. Act IV was refreshing, and a good lead in to Act V. Then it goes back to guitar 1, and I really like how thoughtful the guitarwork on that track is.

Act VII was a good build up to VIII, which added even more build to the song. Act VIIII added more, and I loved the synth arpeggios. You have great lead ins to sections.

Act X had the resolve needed for the rest of the sections, and was a great section. But, For "The End", I would change the synth part. I don't feel like it goes with the rest of the song. And thats my only Problem with the song.

Good song.

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hahaha ive listened to this before :p a while ago, Ive definitely opened this zip file before and looked through a few of these, I can remember haha. Anyways.

The intro is good, as was the verse, a bit more steady. It was just the classic dotted dotted eighth that you hear all over post-hardcore, but the 7/4 bar made it seem different, yet it wasn't off at all.

The chorus is my favorite part though. It sorta reminds me of an Underoath chorus?? The power chords with the following lead and a heavy strings part in the back gives it an epic feel almost, I really like it.

The following breakdown was pretty sweet too. It sorta started off with a basic generic breakdown, but that was forgiven with the tapping, although that was a bit generic as well. But I really do not care as long as it sounds good. And its not like its the entire song or anything, it was nice to incorporate a breakdown section into a song that really doesnt rely on the "broot" of metalcore too much.

The next section was another metalcore riff it seems, but as a fan of metalcore, I really do enjoy it haha and I love hearing riffs like these, but not if theyre crowding the song up. This was not, it was great as is. However....the transition into the chorus didnt do it for me. It was nice changing the tempo from the chorus into a breakdown, but it can be harder trying to make it go back into the tempo of the chorus. I really tried to see what could be done, but it just didnt sound natural.

The chorus itself was still good though! As was the verse that followed it, again. The surprise was when the strings entered, which sounded a little overpowering on guitar pro, but I think I can imagine what it'd be like, sorta that epic fat strings sound, I think thatd be great if pulled off well. The Bridge was pretty crazy, it continued this vibe well, It stayed in this epic little section that I really enjoyed, it was my next favorite part of the song...

The breakdown, was just superb. The pattern from before sounds great behind this new lead you had going, gave it a lot more power. And then for some reason, the tranistion into this chorus didnt feel too off at all. What felt a little funny was the chorus into the next part, the Bridge (a). In fact, I think itd be nice if you let the song just end at that last chorus. Then you have a sweet rocker all the way through, and as theyre listening, it changes to this track which is just soothing...a great post-hardcore little section.

However, this whole post-hardcore section really does seem like a whole other song...it doesnt really belong. And Im all for changing genres and moods throughout songs, thats what keeps them alive, but this, for some reason, seems to not fit. And it seems pretty long, so to make it a separate song would not be too strange. Or possibly, I would even consider having the clean post-hardcore section to begin the entire song and then get started with the real song. The chorus in this part were the same chords from the distorted chorus earlier right? Well I liked it, but I still think that it could last on its own as a separate track, like maybe as a pt. 2, you know?

Anyways, songwriting aside, the bass parts are really great, only the MIDI really doesnt do it justice as it makes the bass sound like a trumpet or something haha, but I can admire the work...the guitar solo as well was great, I think it could have lasted longer though...it was good though, couldve lasted a bit longer with the mood that it gave...

This transition into the chorus wasnt too good either I thought....perhaps it would sound better with just a reverse cymbal and then a pause for half a second or a snare hit or something, or maybe its just out of place...but then again, the parts that come after it are too amazing, you cant change what I find to be the climax of the song...id try to fix the transition though, maybe make it a bit longer than it is.

My only complaint with the outro would have been that it didnt last too long (it could have lead into a solo, a harmony, a counter-melody over top what you have, etc.), but ending it how it did was fine too, it sorta left me hanging for me, yet I felt like I was pleased at the same time...the outro itself was great, I love the layering and the strings, it all was great.
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i dont wanna be a dink but everything was generic and odd sounding, as well as boring, some ideas were good but theye arnt really "there" yet. i did like the post rock song though, A LOT, another thing that i liked was bar 154 in the song your first and only mistake, im just a sucker for the crazy synth drums, like what AAL use

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i dont wanna be a dink but everything was generic and odd sounding, as well as boring, some ideas were good but theye arnt really "there" yet. i did like the post rock song though, A LOT, another thing that i liked was bar 154 in the song your first and only mistake, im just a sucker for the crazy synth drums, like what AAL use


Thanks for the worlds least constructive crit ever.
A lot of the metalcore songs were written years ago and are very generic and contrived, I've only kept them in because they'll be a bit in there that I still enjoy.
If you're gonna give a critique at least point to which parts you thought were lacking, why, and how they could be improved.
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