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Old 12-02-2010, 10:19 AM   #1
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page 32: boys who write diaries are gay

my writing is not good lately, i know.

this week was supposed to be perfect, just the two of us and then it started snowing,
now i haven't seen her since tuesday and although that was the best day ever (for me)
her red hair stood out amongst the snow and in that second i didn't mind not being able to feel my feet
i really would like to see her again before christmas break because then i won't see her until the new year
and well who knows who we'll be in 2011

i thought i seen her once but it was just my imagination, i hate my imagination
infact i always see her when she's not there, i think i have made her up inside my head.
i like to write.
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Old 12-02-2010, 10:33 AM   #2
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Old 12-02-2010, 03:31 PM   #3
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I can see what you're trying to say, but it doesn't get across very well.
The end is quite unexpected, but the aha-erlebnis isn't happening. It's just too sudden. It's not like you're building up to something, or you're telling something. I feel like just reading a enumeration, or just a registration of events, without knowing what to think of them.

Don't worry, she's real if you think she is.
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Old 12-02-2010, 03:59 PM   #4
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man, i feel this like an old memory of someone. it's so honest and true. i love it.
eye of a needle
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Old 12-02-2010, 05:39 PM   #5
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My ex-girlfriend was a redhead, and I loved her dearly. Maybe that's why I like this so much.
Originally Posted by dannyalcatraz
Love is blind, and probably missing a few other senses, too.

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If I had the money, I wouldn't be posting links to sales, I'd be posting NGDs!

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