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Old 01-11-2011, 02:13 AM   #1
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This is probably one of my only songs that I really enjoy. Just made it last night/today. I just wrote a guitar part, no bass or drums because I'm usually pretty bad at doing that Any criticism would be nice. Post a link to your song and I'll critic yours too.
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Old 01-11-2011, 08:12 PM   #2
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i like the atmosphere it makes. measure 7 didnt fit fore me tho the rest sounds fine. the constant eighth notes of the song felt a little monotonous for me. im glad it gets a little more variety towards the end. maybe add a second layer. as for the ending maybe draw it out a bit more. this probably sounds much better on an acoustic with the notes ringing out. as a matter of fact i played some of it on mine. fits the title great. btw thanks for the crit man hope this provides insight
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Old 01-11-2011, 09:27 PM   #3
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Yeah, I kind of felt the same way about the eighth notes myself, which is why near the end I used a couple of quarter notes. I don't like to play too fast so I usually don't use sixteenth notes (not saying sixteenth notes are really fast, but just too fast for the kind of style I play), but I probably could of done a couple more quarter notes or something.
I still need to work on ending it better, I agree. I have a tough time keeping a song going on long while trying to stay creative, especially in instrumentals.
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Old 01-25-2011, 12:31 AM   #4
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Hey sorry, I haven't been on much. Exams are on now. I decided I'd take a break from studies so I can finally crit this. Thanks for yours.

Critting as I listen.

That isss rather haunting lol. I really like the atmosphere it holds. A few bum notes. They sound too major for this haunting minor piece. I just took a look at the time signature. I didn't even realize it was in 5/4. It flows so swell I didn't even realize that. Usually I count along with music to pick out meters but the relaxing feel just kinda made me ignore it.

This is great. Don't scrap this. Build this up. It sounds like some clean opeth.

Very musical. As a theme, this does the job brilliantly.

Thanks again, bro.
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Old 02-01-2011, 12:43 AM   #5
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Just read your comment dervish and thanks a lot! Didn't think anyone was gonna like it too much. Glad I finally wrote a piece worth something haha.
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Old 02-02-2011, 07:18 AM   #6
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Don't think it needs bass or drums, sounds quite atmospheric as it is =). Flows surprisingly well and has enough variation to keep it interesting. For some reason I found it sound better with the entire track set to 'let ring'. Really like what you're doing at Bar 30 onwards, could definitely be expanded into something bigger.

Keep playing around with this!

I would appreciate if you could crit this if you have time =)

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Old 03-04-2011, 12:46 AM   #7
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So I added in another guitar and some drums, and I liked it at first but now I dunno. Kind of sounds like too much. I'm not very good at making multiple parts but yeah, I tried. I might redo them, but I'd like to hear what you guys think. Also thinking of redoing the parts at 48 and after because it doesn't transition well.
Don't mind the empty bars at 66 and after, I'm trying to think of something to put there but I'd like to know what you guys think of what I got going on so far. Like alway c4c. Also I guess the thread title is misleading now
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Old 03-04-2011, 10:09 AM   #8
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Critting as I go along. I'd appreciate a crit on "Who's Listening" in my sig if you get the chance.

Bars 1-16: I like the flow of the main guitar part but honestly, I could see just taking the 2nd Guitar part out. You have the volume mixed very low on it as it is but even when turned up a little it just doesn't mesh. The main guitar part is good enough that it can stand on its own there I think.

Bars 22-29: This is where I like the Distortion to come in and accent the cleaner guitar part. The Distortion part tends to make it sound more dissonant but its a good, Haunting dissonance if that makes sense lol.

Bars 30-32: Mixing it up here I REALLY think the ends of bars 30 and 32 should end on a Quarter note G (3 on E string) and just cutting out the G# Eighth. That little stop at the end of each bar meshes well with the Drum track.

Bars 58 Onward: I really like the switch at Bar 58. With an instrumental track like this finding the transitions without being abrupt is tough but you did it there perfectly.

Overall its got potential and definitely think this deserves to keep working on. Like a previous poster said, does seem very Clean-Opethy.
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Old 03-06-2011, 11:53 PM   #9
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Thank you. I have the second guitar mixed low because since it is distorted it would be too loud and distract you too much from the main guitar if I had it louder. I'll think about changing bars 30 and 32, and see how it sounds but I do like the way it is now.
Thanks for the compliment on the transition. That's probably where I need work on the most, I'm pretty bad at transitions if you noticed lol. Just one question though, did you think the drums fit in well? I'm not the best at writing for drums so usually it doesn't come out the best, but I think I did alright.

I'll be sure to listen to your song "Who's Listening" as soon as I can.
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Old 03-07-2011, 07:56 PM   #10
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Made a slight change and got rid of the second guitar part for bars 3, 6, and 7.
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Old 03-07-2011, 08:12 PM   #11
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Does exactly what it says on the tin.
This is a good composition.
Far beyond my capabilities.
The only things that i'd crit on about this piece is that i think the drums and lead guitar should be louder.

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