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Old 09-15-2014, 07:05 AM   #1
ComradeDzhek
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UK Lab Rat

A sort of folk/rock/punk/acoustic sound. I was stuck with just the first 2 verses for ages so it feels good to finally have a first draft done. Still very subject to change so any and all feedback will be met with open arms!

Lab Rat

(Verse - a)
She’s tired of living and lately the days
Haven’t been so forgiving, they’re one and the same
She’d paint you a picture but at the end of the day
Not a thousand words could get you halfway

(verse - b)
But when running in circles gets to your head
You start to think “When I wake, I better be dead”
But she knows the world doesn’t work that way
And she’s lost the ability to enjoy entropy;

(Refrain)
She’s a lab rat.

(verse - a)
She grew fond of spirits around March last year,
Made her troubles seem smaller but her friends disappeared
And she crashed her car in a fit of despair
She figured hitting that lamppost would maybe mess up her hair

(verse - b)
Because running in circles gets to your head
And it’s odd what you’ll do to not know what’s ahead
So she sneers when they look at her like she’s gone insane
And cackles when no one will admit they’re the same;

(Refrain 2)
They’re all lab rats
They’re all lab rats trapped in the same maze.

(Break)
So she tried to hang herself but the rope snapped
She thought of drinking bleach but settled for schnapps
And her in blind rage she washed her reds with her whites
So tomorrow might feel less like another rewrite.

(Instrumental)

(Verse - a)
Silence now, she’s going to make her move
She’s been talking in her sleep, she’s got something to prove
She wears her pink clothes and posts her key through the door
And she turns to leave before they can hit the floor.

(Verse - b)
There’s only so much weight that can hold you back
But it helps if there’s someone left to pick up the slack
So I bought her a ticket for a train at noon
And I let her eyes lie when she said “See you soon”.

(Refrain 3 and ending)
She’s a lab rat.
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Old 09-15-2014, 12:40 PM   #2
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I really enjoyed reading this, and I look forward to hear it!
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Old 09-22-2014, 10:48 AM   #3
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Gratz on getting a full version down, always a great feeling haha. I like it overall, especially the break, the one thing I'd say is the line "And it’s odd what you’ll do to not know what’s ahead" comes off a little clunky. Great work on this
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