06-08-2011, 03:09 PM
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so awkward
Join Date: Jul 2010
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Easycore/Pop-punk. Unfinished.
This is one my song that i cannot finish. To be honest i can't finished any of them
 But i think now I have to learn how to complete my creations.So i want you guys to help me I looking for some critic (who knows maybe this is a musical garbage),some tips or advices how to make it better. |
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06-08-2011, 03:35 PM
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accly was dolan
Join Date: Aug 2009
Location: Fairfax, Virginia
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Not much to say other than it's pretty painfully generic. Lay off the I V vi IV, man, it's so boring.
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06-08-2011, 10:25 PM
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hail yeezus
Join Date: May 2009
Location: walking into a sign
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Yeah ridiculously generic, if thats what your going for move it a string higher. If thats not what your going for throw in some different types of chords. Maybe some 7's or 9's. Throw some blue in there too. C4C http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1449848
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06-09-2011, 06:00 AM
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so awkward
Join Date: Jul 2010
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Well this is pop punk.It shouldn't be so complex
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06-09-2011, 09:45 AM
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accly was dolan
Join Date: Aug 2009
Location: Fairfax, Virginia
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That doesn't mean it should be boring.
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06-09-2011, 01:10 PM
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so awkward
Join Date: Jul 2010
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Not sure how to do it more interesting but i'll try
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06-09-2011, 02:41 PM
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hail yeezus
Join Date: May 2009
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when you do chords on the A and D strings instead of the standard straight power chords do some thing like D|9 11 9 11 9 A|7 7 7 7 7 Its kinda hard to make tabs on here
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06-13-2011, 11:58 AM
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Join Date: Jan 2010
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It is generic, but to me it sounded cool.
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06-14-2011, 08:00 PM
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slaps basses and faces.
Join Date: Mar 2008
Location: Somewhere with lots of corn, Wisconsin
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I liked the intro riff, but after that, there's very little variation or anything to add interest. Try riffs that aren't straight eighth notes, and work on your drum track. Also, in the verse, at bar 16, it sounds awkward to have the bass at 5th fret on the E; move it to 5th on the A.
C4C? The link's in my sig.
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