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Old 09-26-2011, 12:47 PM   #1
Dillon_Kennedy
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Sofa King (ots)

Sleeper on decrepit throne
Hear thy name from pulpit call

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Forevermore

Peasant in thy early grave
'Tis your choice to be a slave

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Perpetual
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Old 09-28-2011, 04:03 AM   #2
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Sleeper on the decrepit throne
Hear thy name from pulpit call

Choose to animate
Or just to wait
Forevermore I liked everything until I hit this word. I just don't find the word "forevermore" especially interesting.

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'Tis your choice to be a slave

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Perpetual Better

I'm not entirely sure if I'm right, but what this piece made me think of is just general laziness (cause of the word "sofa" in the title). I was a bit confused about whether you were talking about a sofa or an actual throne at the start.


I really like this, it's a well balance between "concise" and "vague". It doesn't really seem like a full piece though, more like a small piece of writing in a notebook.

Anyway, well done.
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Old 09-28-2011, 06:28 AM   #3
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i left THE out for flow, but you are right about it being about laziness. It was just something to kinda play around with while waiting for my brother to wake up. (he was sleeping on the couch lol) anyway thanks for the intput, i was beginning to think this was getting overlooked completely
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