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Old 04-18-2012, 09:30 PM   #1
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Sad Song of Sadness and Misery... and More Misery

Hey UG, I would like some feedback on this short song I composed. I'm planning on adding more but at this point all I have is this and I would like a critique on it.

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Old 04-19-2012, 06:34 AM   #2
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Wow, straight away mad eme think of Yann Tiersen and Ludovico Einaudi. I really enjoyed it, you;ve got a very beautiful melancholic tune going on there!

It's a very touching tune which is hard to achieve. A really good song! Although if I could give one piece of advice, yu might wanna end it on a lower key rather than the high note.

Good stuff!

Could you please crit mine back? - http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1534129
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Old 04-19-2012, 10:00 AM   #3
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Wow, straight away mad eme think of Yann Tiersen and Ludovico Einaudi. I really enjoyed it, you;ve got a very beautiful melancholic tune going on there!

It's a very touching tune which is hard to achieve. A really good song! Although if I could give one piece of advice, yu might wanna end it on a lower key rather than the high note.

Good stuff!

Could you please crit mine back? - http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1534129


I'll look at that in a bit, I can't access Youtube from here. What's eme?
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Old 04-19-2012, 10:19 AM   #4
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My first reaction is that more could of been done with the piano part in the intro. I was constantly humming little melodies that would of fitted in. It sounds very sparse as it is so maybe something else added could fit in well.

I can't really crit this as a song, because it sounds like a minute and a bit long loop more than a song, really needs a little bit of variation and flavour going on in there. The mix however is pretty damn good.

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Old 04-19-2012, 10:56 AM   #5
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I liked it a lot. The piano has a great ton and the backing chorus sounds are excellent. A little more variety might be nice though. Another thing you could look at is maybe adding some pads or drones very faintly to give some more atmosphere.
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Old 04-20-2012, 02:55 PM   #6
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Old 04-21-2012, 07:51 AM   #7
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Hey man, I see you want to work with writing for video games, and you're off to a great start, this is a solid composition, which I could definitely see in a game (with a little tweaking).

The melodies and chords are good, and I like the instrumentation, there are a few things I would suggest to improve it however:

- Add little trills on the piano every now and then to enhance the melody
- Make use of dynamics, i.e. piano, forte, crescendos, diminuendos. Your piece was all on the same dynamic level, and you could deffinately use dynamics to make the piece more powerful.
- Extra (sparse) orchestral instrumentation in parts such as timpanis, xylophone could prehaps make the piece bolder?
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Old 04-22-2012, 03:07 PM   #8
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I rather enjoyed this piece. Thank you for sending me the link. it was quite beautiful. There are so many different ways that you could go with it, but it is deffinately a great start to a beautiful piece of music.
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Old 04-24-2012, 03:05 PM   #9
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I think it definately has a lot of potential. As has been said before use of dynamics and some additional parts for the melody would do this a great service
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Old 04-25-2012, 06:39 PM   #10
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yeah, its very nice. It just needs something more! but i cant really judge more untill i hear the final version.
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Old 04-29-2012, 12:07 PM   #11
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This would make a great film score bit. Glad to see you're pursuing that career path.
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Old 04-30-2012, 03:11 AM   #12
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Beautiful!

This would slot into to a plethora of movie sequences with ease. Reminiscent of Yann Tiersen (and kinda moonlight sonata-ish .

I would love to hear the full arrangement with strings (I mean the sample still sounds good as being composed for a quartet, as you could write in individual parts for the instruments to enhance it (e.g. a small quaver run on the cello between chord changes). It has heaps of potential in that department.

Really nailed the mood and ambience. Nice work. Would love to hear other samples used in the background as well, Olafur Arnalds style.

I have made a happy song... to counter your epic sad Its happy at the end anyway. It'd be rad if you could listen
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Sorry for the bump mods, I got here from OPs sig.

Just wanted to this is really cool, it really reminds of Shenmue. Perhaps it's the piano and choir sounds. Having played a lot of flash games, this would easily be used by somebody.

But I noticed it's been well over a year and you've not done anymore, get on it now!
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