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Old 09-07-2012, 12:41 AM   #1
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Fifty Two and Extra Aces

A black ring,
hanging on the words of an angered queen
sits the king.
His clubs won't kill,
his hearts won't heal,
his diamonds aren't worth a dime.
But with his spades,
he's digging himself a grave.

Though he thought
as he played a stacked deck
That he'd never regret
his "all-in" call.


Needless to say this is a heavy reference to a deck of cards, but I'm a little stuck as to where to go from here. Suggestions are always welcome.
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Old 09-10-2012, 05:18 AM   #2
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Cool

Why does it have to go anywhere? A few tweaks and this is a pretty decent piece as is.

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