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Old 07-25-2012, 05:40 PM   #1
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Arrow WotW : meriden [lyrics + chords]

I would like some input on these lyrics

whaddaya like, whaddaya h8? i been playing the same chords for all the verses so i'll write em out once if you wanna give this tune a go yourself. i capo on 3 so the song's really in b-flat, but that's just for my vocal comfort

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"meriden" [lyrics] G G/C G G/C an hour on the canvas every morning G Am C D the sun won't rise until the bastard stirs Am B7 Em and the commonwealth banderos bear a warning C D G G/C i just hope they'll separate the his and hers. the morning turns your eyeballs into burning oil wells getting high and hot and bothered when you blink and i sometimes get this feeling like i'm passing thru a sieve like you'd ever want to pan for gold in me. the road goes ever on in one direction so you can have a year's head start on me we'll write each other empty parallelograms and get tattoos that we will never see. your fire reaches skyward with elation to the fault lines on my little parapet with my rosary of past humiliations i'm protected from the ones that i'll forget.
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Old 08-01-2012, 10:45 AM   #2
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Hi Evan. Some nice lines in there. I wouldn't say I h8 it or anything, but the first stanza was a bit too scattered to really draw me in. It tightened up more after that.

Good to see you post something. hope you're well.
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Old 08-02-2012, 09:09 PM   #3
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holy hell man, welcome back!

i think you can do much better than:
and i sometimes get this feeling like i'm passing thru a sieve
like you'd ever want to pan for gold in me.

it just is too darn cliche what with the gold and all.

i really enjoyed the rest. recording please?
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Old 08-03-2012, 12:06 AM   #4
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Old 08-06-2012, 12:34 PM   #5
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So you're still alive. Good to know. I enjoyed this and would like to hear it as music.
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Old 08-07-2012, 09:21 PM   #6
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any recording?


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Old 08-09-2012, 09:05 PM   #7
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holy hell man, welcome back!

i think you can do much better than:
and i sometimes get this feeling like i'm passing thru a sieve
like you'd ever want to pan for gold in me.

it just is too darn cliche what with the gold and all.

i really enjoyed the rest. recording please?


I thought the "like you'd ever want to pan for gold in me" was fantastic. Painfully honest and simple. My favorite bit.
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Old 09-12-2012, 02:44 PM   #8
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I thought the "like you'd ever want to pan for gold in me" was fantastic. Painfully honest and simple. My favorite bit.



Thanks it's mine too
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