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Old 09-15-2012, 06:46 PM   #1
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WotW - Fumes and God

A censer scents an empty alleyway

its musk in the shadow of gasoline

burning the air to some degree


mercury runs free on the walls

like the muathins' voices embracing

the fifty-something-old edifice

but never together, always


a second


apart


There is no peace in the East,

only the censer and the adhan:

a song of fumes and God.
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Old 09-18-2012, 06:29 PM   #2
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Grats, solid peace. But, I have never seen them called the "muathin" before. Nor, can I find info on the use of that word. Thought it was the Muadhin. Care to elaborate?
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Old 09-18-2012, 06:36 PM   #3
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Thanks, and it just depends on the accent. Technically where I'm from, it's pronounced 'Muazin' but I went with the more formal pronunciation.

EDIT: Actually ignore that part, that's wrong
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Old 09-18-2012, 07:05 PM   #4
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Old 09-18-2012, 07:07 PM   #5
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Thank you I'm glad I finally got one of these
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Old 09-26-2012, 08:47 PM   #6
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Old 10-25-2012, 11:02 PM   #7
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I'll return to this, but I'll say that I didn't like this that much, mostly because I think it's all over the place. Later tonight I'll try to properly critique this.










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Old 10-26-2012, 10:00 PM   #8
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Did an adbot just call my piece 'all over the place'?


My foot shall make contact with yr arse swiftly and with such brute force that your merchandise will implode due to the sheer pressure.

oh and *reported*
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Old 11-07-2012, 01:02 PM   #9
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