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Old 09-18-2012, 09:58 AM   #1
NGD1313
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Aberrations

and if i never get better
it's just as well
each word you speak is hell
colorless cheeks
ribboned lapels
the tale the tape hiss tells.

you are a defeated smile
hanging just below the eyes;
i am the off-chance
anybody notices

it is in this
small room
shoveling twenty years of snow
you and i will come to know
the nothing that is coming.
it is in this
wounded bird of a heart
i will finally apologize
but it will sound far too much
like goodbye.
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Old 09-18-2012, 12:49 PM   #2
Factor13x
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Location: Marion, Indiana
nice man, simple but good. my only issue is that the first verse just seems to have almost a little too much rhyming. but other then that its good
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Lyrics:
To The Grave
The Marionette
Our Last Dance
DaVinci Would Be Jealous
An Angel No More

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Jackson DKXT Dinky
Silver Star Semi-Hollow Body
Peavey Vypyr 30w, 1 x 12 Combo Amp
Korg Nanopad
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Old 09-18-2012, 02:32 PM   #3
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Please never stop posting. Thanks.
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