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Old 09-13-2012, 04:32 PM   #1
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Untited Melodeath Song

Small bit of background story here. This song is about one of my best friends. We've both helped eachother through particularly bad times, and each time, we keep ending up worse off. So I wrote this for him.

Still needs a bit of work lyrically, any feedback or ideas for changes welcome
Melodeath, all screamo:

Sometimes, You just need a reason to survive
Even If It's just joining a pile of reasons to die
The death clock takes it's toll, Struck five to
But you're so far gone, oh god I can't lose you too

And whenever life feels all alone
Don't forget who you are and the secrets you hold
You got me to safety but now you're so far gone
Don't say goodbye tonight or I'll meet you in hell

After all you've done, you can't leave me here
Wallowing! In my states of madness and fear
I got too many people living inside of me
I need you to decide, which one should I adhere?

And whenever life feels all alone
Don't forget who you are and the secrets you hold
You got me to safety but now you're so far gone
Don't say goodbye tonight or I'll meet you in hell

I Need You
I Need You
I Need You
I Need You
To Show Me How To Live
You Need Me Too!

And whenever life feels all alone
Don't forget who you are and the secrets you hold
You got me to safety but now you're so far gone
Don't say goodbye tonight or I'll meet you in hell
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Old 09-13-2012, 05:40 PM   #2
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Besides some rhythm problem i can see happening in the verses, due to differences between amounts of syllables, this is a pretty nice melodeath piece. I'm actually looking for more melodeath lyrics to read since what i've written and hope to continue with are melodeath pieces for a non existent project.*
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Old 09-14-2012, 08:55 AM   #3
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This is awesome! I like the darkness laying inside the song .. beneath the lyrics. This isn't a song that just comes up, or something you just write. It's something you've felt .. the darkness, the pain, the fear ... That made you wrote this, and i like it ... Keep it up bro!
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Old 09-23-2012, 05:22 AM   #4
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Thanks guys

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