09-23-2012, 04:17 PM
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Join Date: Dec 2011
Location: Nuremberg, Germany
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Rats never make a sound
can't breathe the air outside
it's full if toxic smoke life has become a fight i can't see myself in a mirror broken smell the smoke of burning churches watch the crown fall to the ground every day it's getting worse but rats never make a sound i walk through the streets at night stranger's eyes in my back tonight it's very quiet like the silence before the storm make no sound and watch them quiet waiting for that faithfull day it's time for a revolution soon we will take back controll the strongest force cannot resist us the rats come out of their holes smell the smoke of burning churches watch the crown fall to the ground every day it's getting more worse the rats never make a sound Last edited by StreetBass252 : 09-24-2012 at 10:18 AM. |
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09-23-2012, 04:25 PM
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Use Your Imagination
Join Date: Aug 2008
Location: Marion, Indiana
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ok honestly im just confused. i dont really know what to think about this song. some of the imagery is great but the placement and wording just throws me off and makes it all really hard to follow not to mention some grammar issues like "more worse" just dont make sense. id try editing this a bit and work through some of those issues.
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09-23-2012, 04:30 PM
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Join Date: Dec 2011
Location: Nuremberg, Germany
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Haha, I'm sorry about the grammar mistakes. Thanks for the critics, i'm going to edit it tomorrow, maybe it is a little bit clearer then.
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