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Old 09-23-2012, 04:17 PM   #1
StreetBass252
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Rats never make a sound

can't breathe the air outside
it's full if toxic smoke
life has become a fight
i can't see myself in a mirror broken

smell the smoke of burning churches
watch the crown fall to the ground
every day it's getting worse
but rats never make a sound

i walk through the streets at night
stranger's eyes in my back
tonight it's very quiet
like the silence before the storm

make no sound and watch them quiet
waiting for that faithfull day
it's time for a revolution
soon we will take back controll
the strongest force cannot resist us
the rats come out of their holes

smell the smoke of burning churches
watch the crown fall to the ground
every day it's getting more worse
the rats never make a sound

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Old 09-23-2012, 04:25 PM   #2
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ok honestly im just confused. i dont really know what to think about this song. some of the imagery is great but the placement and wording just throws me off and makes it all really hard to follow not to mention some grammar issues like "more worse" just dont make sense. id try editing this a bit and work through some of those issues.
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Old 09-23-2012, 04:30 PM   #3
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Haha, I'm sorry about the grammar mistakes. Thanks for the critics, i'm going to edit it tomorrow, maybe it is a little bit clearer then.
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