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Old 09-26-2012, 12:38 AM   #1
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[C4C] Shallow Blues (I'm not buying it)

One year ago I posted here a blues song idea, I came up with. Now since I found a singer for that song, I'd like to present you its new rearranged version with vocal.

I hope you'll like it

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Old 09-28-2012, 07:08 PM   #2
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Awesome vocals! Really make the song! The mixing is great too, the bass is nice and clear and the guitars sound pretty good. Only thing I can see is that of the bends are off, but that's only minor. Sounds excellent though!
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Old 09-29-2012, 11:10 AM   #3
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Thanks Well I guess some sounds might sound a bit off, because my guitar doesn't tune on fretboard like it used to. I need to set it up, but other than that when I started to use thicker strings, that cuts for strings you've got in the nut, got deeper, so it's harder to set up now. All that bends are one step bends and it's obvious, so I don't know why I write this, but when I bend a string like that, I bend it to the point, when the sound matchs the sound two frets farther and when it's off... Other than that I guess I've never learned to bend so perfectly, like I should.

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Old 09-29-2012, 02:07 PM   #4
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At first it seemed odd the one guitar was all on one side, then the other guitar kicked in & then it sounded fine. Vocals are good (except not as good around 2:50, my least favorite part of the song). Guitar playing is good! Drums & bass are fine. Overall it sounds good! Please review my music at this link:

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Old 09-30-2012, 05:20 PM   #5
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Thank you for the crit. Well I had to pan guitars on intro part 100% on left and right side, because when they were closer, they interfered with each other too much and it gave unpleasant effect.
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Old 10-01-2012, 02:28 AM   #6
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Thanks a bunch for the crit on my stuff!
Im real impressed by your track. I thought the singing was great through the whole song. Mixing was done well and the bass/drums are pretty solid. I like your arrangement to where it all gets chilled, seems like the songs going to end, and then blam, straight back into the main theme. The only thing I'd maybe change are those string bends too (but thats all been said before). Otherwise, awesome stuff!
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Old 10-01-2012, 11:25 AM   #7
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Sorry for the delay for the C4C, it was a busy week. Finally checked it out.

I love the laid back blues vibe on this track. With the vocals and how the song is arranged, I hear a huge Bon Jovi influence. The instrumentals and vocals are pretty solid, vocals also fits the song. There is great execution in the verse, but I am not a fan of the vocals on the chorus (I'm not buying it) part. The bridge is sweet, but I feel there is tons of potential to build up from the section 3:47-4:09, feels a little empty and redundant. Quality is great, and playability is good too. Overall, it's a sweet tune. Looking forward to hear more!
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Old 10-01-2012, 06:09 PM   #8
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Thanks a bunch for the crit on my stuff!
Im real impressed by your track. I thought the singing was great through the whole song. Mixing was done well and the bass/drums are pretty solid. I like your arrangement to where it all gets chilled, seems like the songs going to end, and then blam, straight back into the main theme. The only thing I'd maybe change are those string bends too (but thats all been said before). Otherwise, awesome stuff!


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Sorry for the delay for the C4C, it was a busy week. Finally checked it out.

I love the laid back blues vibe on this track. With the vocals and how the song is arranged, I hear a huge Bon Jovi influence. The instrumentals and vocals are pretty solid, vocals also fits the song. There is great execution in the verse, but I am not a fan of the vocals on the chorus (I'm not buying it) part. The bridge is sweet, but I feel there is tons of potential to build up from the section 3:47-4:09, feels a little empty and redundant. Quality is great, and playability is good too. Overall, it's a sweet tune. Looking forward to hear more!


Thanks Actually I don't listen to Bon Jovi, but ok On 3:47-4:09 section, I wanted to change the mood of the song, kinda lower listener's concentration, "put him into trance" then bring him back to the point where he was before, make him feel like he's listening to a two different songs. Something like that... if only that make any sense to anyone else
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Old 10-01-2012, 08:08 PM   #9
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I REALLY liked the song man! The vocals were amazing. The guitar playing itself was sweet too! Great job!
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Old 10-02-2012, 04:10 PM   #10
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Old 10-07-2012, 05:55 PM   #11
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It's been said already but your vocals are killer! love your guitar tone too by the way reminds me so much of Dire Straits good job!
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Old 10-08-2012, 05:58 PM   #12
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Thanks Well I don't listen to them and at first I didn't know that actually I know one of their songs "Money for nothing", but somehow I've never noticed, who's song it is. Cheers
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Old 10-11-2012, 12:49 AM   #13
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Hey dude noice!!! It rocks I like the interplay you got going on with the guitars. That vocal is nasty I dig it. . Good playing good singing. It's purrty sick dude I dig.
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Old 10-11-2012, 03:10 PM   #14
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Old 11-02-2012, 01:01 AM   #15
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This is pretty awesome! All the instruments seem to be mixed well, and I love the singer and guitar tones. Nice and gritty.

If I have any complaint, it's that the guitars and the singer seem to be taking up the same frequencies during the first verse which makes the lyrics difficult to understand since the vocals and guitars blend together. Adding some subtle EQ boosting in the mid-highs of the vocal track might help, or you could probably get away with just raising the volume.
Also, the vocals on the choruses seem to get a little off rhythmically, especially towards the end of the song.

Other than those nitpicky comments, this is a very well-done song. Great job!
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Old 11-02-2012, 09:31 AM   #16
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Solid backing track, I'm not a fan of the vocals though. The voice was fitting its just I feel u could have worked out better melodies. They just felt a little rushed or something. Good guitar tone. I liked the bass too.

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Old 11-03-2012, 10:02 PM   #17
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Thanks for your reviews

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The rhythm guitars and the vocal are EQ the same way through the whole song, so I don't know why you got such impression only during the first verse, but you're right and some people mentioned that before too, the vocal track could be a bit louder in the mix.

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I know it may sounds weird at some places, because some lines in the lyric are longer and some shorter, but maybe after listening to it a couple of times you'd get use to it and it won't be a problem. There are songs you have to listen a few times before you start to like them, but of course it doesn't have to be like that.

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Old 11-04-2012, 04:35 PM   #18
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Thank you for the crit. Well I had to pan guitars on intro part 100% on left and right side, because when they were closer, they interfered with each other too much and it gave unpleasant effect.


One trick you can do is don't pan 100% when just one guitar is playing. Just switch to 100% when the other guitar comes in. It makes the effect less harsh, and I find the change in panning isn't too noticeable because the other guitar takes up the space.

Definitely a Dire Straits vibe at first! I think the vocals could be a little louder. The voice is good enough to be the main focus. The chorus melody is the weak point.

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Old 11-08-2012, 07:57 PM   #19
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Old 11-08-2012, 11:26 PM   #20
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im a big fan of the tone on the lead guitar, it sounds dope. the riff is pretty catchy too, and surprisingly, i expected this song to be kind of unoriginal or similar to other blues songs, but it really is pretty different in that sense. good stuff, i see lots of potential!

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