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Old 10-05-2012, 12:53 PM   #1
L2112Lif
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Love (WIP)

I haven't finished some of the work yet, and I'm still trying to find a better character than O'Brien to fit into the one stanza. Nonetheless, I could totally use some constructive criticism on this one.

Love

Bombed-out buildings and flooded streets
the planet trembles beneath our feet
moneychanger's tables bare
we sell our labor we know not where

for the love of money
for the love of war
but not for the love of another
we would settle the score

For the love of justice
for the love of youth
it is not my burden
to bear the fruit of truth

Campaign lies and speeches
bells ring in my ears
a marriage at the Old North
to last a hundred years
John Galt and the Sirens
own the world's right ear

This is all we have
thanks to you, this is all we have
by Grace, this is what we have
but were promised so much more

Fences of barbed wire, tall
silhouettes against the floodlights
But it's too bright, and I can't sleep tight
rage against the coming night

For the love of progress
even when it's mute
Not for the love of adaptation
the conveyor slowly moves

For the love of justice
for the love of youth
it is not my burden
to bear the fruit of truth

There's some method in the madness
and some fire in the fluff
A train at Dearborn station
is running, eastward bound
A party-man, O'Brien
Has the left ear of the town

This is all we have
thanks to you, this is all we have
by Grace, this is what we have
but were promised so much more
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