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Old 10-11-2012, 06:37 AM   #1
This_Kidd
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New, unfinished jazzy song

Hey people,

I've started working on this, I feel like it's sounding quite nice, but I'd like some opinions. It doesn't have any vocals yet, I have a thread about that here if anyone wants to contribute: http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru....php?forumid=25


It's just a jazzy song really, not much else needs to be said!

So here it is: http://soundcloud.com/mike-sheppard90/bounce-111012

As always, C4C is a must, so fire away

Cheers,
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Old 10-11-2012, 12:51 PM   #2
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The piano is very pleasant. The drum track works, I feel like it could be better though. Adding some percussion could really benefit the song and add some cool energy to it. Some sort of a citizen cope type drum beat to it. I would definitely cut out any percussion for the section at :40. I like that a lot how it is . The fretless bass line coming in sounds great .Matches the jazzy feel. I would maybe even just use that for the whole song, but I understand that your trying to create movement within the song. The guitar tone is soulfully soft. 2:20 is cool. Nice changeup on the rhythmic ideas. 2:55 is even better. I think those are two of the strongest parts to the song. I would also add another guitar part at 2:55. Some sort of bouncy lead to go along with the new feel.

I'm not sure what your looking for with this song, but I like making pop-structures out of songs that aren't musically very pop oriented. I'd say the best thing you could do for this would be to stick to maybe 2-3 sections of the songs you really like and arrange them in a way that the structure itself provides an added level of intrigue. I understand that would require vocals. I could definitely hear some beach boys, barbershop trio sounding vocals to this.

This song is definitely cool. Still needs a little development and direction I think. Vocals would add a lot to establishing a more tangible theme to it. I would offer to help with that, but its something I struggle with as well, being mainly a guitar player.

Here's my stuff. Feel free to just crit one of the songs, preferably not the first one because that's one of the songs I think have already been getting looked at

http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1567002
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Old 10-11-2012, 05:54 PM   #3
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Damn dude, that's some decent critiquing right there! I'll get on to your tracks forthwith buddy, cheers!
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Old 10-14-2012, 06:41 PM   #4
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This_Kidd,
I stayed in Brighton for a vacation long ago. Piano and bass sound nice overall. Guitar playing is OK at first, sounds slightly flat at times, though sounds better as the song progresses. Pretty good overall. Please review my music at this link:

http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1565363
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Old 10-14-2012, 08:51 PM   #5
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You do this all yourself? If so props. I like the piano as well, gives it a nice laid back vibe throughout. I also like how the drum changes up feels throughout so as to not get repetitive. Works for what you are doing. As a drummer I like how the beat influences how a listener will feel the song at a particular time. Good job.

Check out my music video if you want, critique the quality and humour of the video, and the quality of my bands song if you want http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1567733
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