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Old 10-23-2012, 11:47 PM   #1
(objects) ocean.
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velvia (ii)

velvia (ii)

ceiling fan cycles
digesting the miles, thinking
"this is what highways really sound like"
a machine that
siphons while i sleep, mornings
met with something missing
between the linoleum and
remembering what i dreamed.

in the drain next to
your house, we followed
our flashlights, looking for ways
to feel small, or lost.
the grass reached down to us and
that was enough,
but i heard that sound
from underneath or within,
and you held on to the strap of my bag
while i hunted it.

when we emerged -
a drainfield, marsh grass all around,
a half moon lost
in the late afternoon.
beyond the guardrail, cars passed
like old summers out of my memory,
and you let go.
online writing

{underlying channels}

behind these two hills here I fall asleep.

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Old 10-24-2012, 03:29 AM   #2
Lost Pilot
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I was hoping the (i) meant there would be more. my computer is dying, but I feel alive! Love it.
Anatomy Anatomy
Whale Blue Review

Park that car
Drop that phone
Sleep on the floor
Dream about me
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Old 10-24-2012, 03:50 AM   #3
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Good imagery.
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Old 11-07-2012, 01:01 PM   #4
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I think you could add just a bit more before ending it where you do - just to make it sink. beautiful words, always.
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it's official, vintage x metal is the saving grace of this board and/or the antichrist

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