11-27-2012, 03:48 PM
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Lets rent bikes from 1942
Join Date: May 2006
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-[FINALS]- Autumn Competition
a Longing actual autumn air as sweet as anything cold color in your cheeks and the trees - lonely anarchists give it all up for the cause we lie in some deciduous drift exchange our secondhand gifts an empty box and a bow you stole an old sweater with patched up holes a list of everything i ever wanted to know then you lean into me, but all i have for you is this longing - that it were spring that you had never given me anything that i could take it back but it doesn't - it doesn't work like that and a harsh wind picks up and you arch your back and crane your neck and listen to traffic pass and when it leaves, i am what's left. and i'm sorry for that. occulta tempore suo (hidden season) incandescent luminary tombstone stitched upon black and purple felted skyline changing now to light brown and faded gray-greens returning now to home and all those delicate home-things quietly floating down I-35 in a coma or a day dream A tailor tracing softly along an unwritten seam fingers pitched and poised for irreverent exchange of breathing bracing now for Winter and a subtle deconstruction of my being incandescent luminary tombstone how glad I am that it's you I've been seeing. Waiting with crystalline hands Impatient as the cold seeps glacially upward Let me in A touch of burning skin; reminiscing Cliché thoughts of days spent in damp embers With warm hands, warm hearts... But this is different A late blossom Stopped in the spring by others Vibrant displays that lure, seduce Leaving you with empty pockets Wasted time Searching through stale nectar As the blazed ground fell to cinders It could push through, different, unknown Unfelt before Let me in Out of the cold Out of the rain Take my hands in yours Just friends It's all I can take now Let me in We can let the days pass Warm inside Together Just friends Just friends. Sternocleidomastoid Your red scarf swam through fall winds anchored by your neck and framed by my eyes. That part of you I said I'd kiss, sternocleidomastoid, a proud word to swallow, practically void but if only you could see you, through the lens I do. Look further; I'm a brown leaf - a dying husk that dances somehow in pulse, circling and fluttering with red fabrics coloring pretty necks on cold days. Germs We are germs procreating with each kiss; swallowing each other’s cough as if our lips were the only gas mask that could pull us through the leaf-stained air – carrier of the season’s change flu. Chewing our bodies, with the blind belief that our skin provided the vitamins that’d keep our body hair out of setting on end to the chilling breeze, as though we were making love in a room full of recent scoured balloons and old television sets. We’re relying on this because holding hands is better than wearing gloves, while treading through humid stones we once feared to slip on. The waves we sometimes gaze upon are getting more violent as our fingers tie together more tightly. But we’re still too afraid to get lost on this need and apparent dependency, because germs are easily eliminated and we are deciduous.
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11-27-2012, 05:28 PM
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do I "urk" you?
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I really liked a Longing and Sternocleidomastoid. Great work.
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11-27-2012, 06:23 PM
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Preserving the name...
Join Date: Feb 2004
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^^^
Same. Although the last had some highs too that made me consider it. For me 1st, just.
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11-27-2012, 06:47 PM
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Weeow!
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first.
but I actually did relate quite a bit to gray so it was a close second.
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11-29-2012, 12:10 PM
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dang, no multi-vote. i liked the last two, 'germs' and the big word one. wish i could vote for both. MY VOTE GOES TO THE LAST ONE.
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11-30-2012, 03:18 PM
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I had to give it to gray. Dem lines was dope, son. Trell.
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12-03-2012, 08:28 PM
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So-Called New-Age(d) Poet
Join Date: Aug 2007
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This is actually quite disputed !
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12-04-2012, 01:12 AM
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Gray. Loved em all but Gray touched something in me
 just wish i had managed to get mine in 
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01-06-2013, 05:45 AM
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Lets rent bikes from 1942
Join Date: May 2006
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sorry I forgot to post results. I would have voted for sienna, breaking the second place tie.
purple 1st sienna 2nd off to check who those belong to, then the points thread
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