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Old 12-07-2012, 10:42 PM   #1
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Help with Short-Film

Hey guys,

Im not sure if I can even post this things here, but I need help. Im doing a school project, a short film about consumerism, and I would like to know what you guys think about it, what could be improved/changed etc. In order to make my work better.

As I said the film had a specific theme (consumerism) and had a time limit as well as a song limit (couldnt use much more than 1 min, hence the dialog).

Heres the link :

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=VsF_...w&feature=share

Hope you guys enjoy, and let me know what you think =)
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Old 12-07-2012, 10:51 PM   #2
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yeah so like, I normally HATE shit like this...

But I'm in one of those moods... So yeah, I guess it was alright.
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Old 12-07-2012, 10:57 PM   #3
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Cheeky Samsung product placement, did they pay you for that?

But yeah, that wasn't bad.
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Old 12-07-2012, 11:06 PM   #4
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I got payed by Oprah, Coca Cola and Samsung :P

I kid, Glad you guys are enjoying it =)
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Old 12-08-2012, 12:16 AM   #5
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Its not too shabby, but use a tripod!!! Some of the still shots are a bit shaky; my film teacher hounded on us about that
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Old 12-08-2012, 12:26 AM   #6
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I actually really liked that, well done. My only criticism is that the female voice-over about the 3000 ads seemed too loud and drowned out the music, it honestly didn't really fit with the tone of the rest of the video and song too but I guess you need the message.
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Old 12-08-2012, 12:27 AM   #7
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Well I guess it proves the point that advertising works cos now I want a daned big mac and coke.
Yeah pretty good though and good choice of music.
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Old 12-08-2012, 10:06 AM   #8
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Thank you all =)

It was a choice not to use the tripod, although I should have, specially on the house shots, which are way to shaky.
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Old 12-08-2012, 10:31 AM   #9
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I got payed by Oprah, Coca Cola and Samsung :P

I kid, Glad you guys are enjoying it =)

and MacDonald's

That was fantastic. Much better than most of the stuff we get around here asking for crit... Loved the Fight Club sample.
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Old 12-08-2012, 10:58 AM   #10
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My advice is to stick to a certain style. The start took a little too long to get to the dialogue. Every shot was good, everything was alright, even the voice acting wasn't bad. But it started like a music video, continued like a documentary and then ended like an art film. I don't know much about making films, so don't read too much into what I say

It was good though. Well done.
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Old 12-08-2012, 11:21 AM   #11
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I couldn't really hear the dialogue because I have shitty netbook speakers but I liked the different perspective of shots. And, yeah, use a tripod.

Also, as someone said earlier, the way the woman spoke didn't really fit into the video. She just spoke with too much enthusiasm.
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Old 12-08-2012, 11:54 AM   #12
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Reminded me a bit of something Charlie Brooker might do. Good job
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Old 12-08-2012, 04:24 PM   #13
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Wow very good feedback =)

Its good to see most of the things people think are wrong, are actually things I'd like to change. It was suposed to be an experimental video of some sort, hence the tryouts of diferent styles, but I agree I should stick to one style and perfect it.

I will be having another short "Video Art" film soon, and will def. share with you guys and get some criticism, probably even before presenting the project, in order to make something really good.
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