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Old 12-17-2012, 12:56 AM   #1
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US Son-In-Law

Okay this might be more adequately titled, The End of The Line. But I think the mysterious title of Son-In-Law helps you put the pieces together as you hear/read it. If it were ever recorded I would probably just call it The End of The Line though, or perhaps title it as Son-In-Law (End of the Line). Either way, I realize its not great, but its my favorite song I've wrote. The verse is played in D & C way up the neck. The Chorus is GCDGCDG played way up the neck. It's supposed to be performed like a folk song. Hope you guys like it!


Iím just sittiní here in this cell, If you ask me itís some kind of hell.
My time here is almost done, maybe I should have never pulled that gun.
But itís a little late now to change it all, if I could do it again Iíd still take the fall.
All because he touched my little girl, I ended his whole worldÖ
But I think I did the world a service, I wasnít even nervous.
Maybe God will forgive me. Cuz the judge couldnít fix the,
Hole inside of my heart. So I knew it was time to start,
Bringing justice on my own, then the bullet hit the boneÖ

[Chorus] Itís the end of the line, the finish of the race. Itís the beginning of the end, itís all been set in place. They said this day would come, and when I see the sun Ö itís the end of the line.

When I looked into his amber eyes, I didnít see any lies.
But it was time for retribution, I didnít know any other solution.
Do I regret it, hell no. It was time for him to go.
But now it is mine, but I feel just fine.
You know I almost called him son, but his anger won.
When my little girl came to me, with a scar on her knee,
And a black eye on her face. That boy lost his place.
I wonder if sheíll keep the ring, or just give it a big fling.

[Chorus] Itís the end of the line, the finish of the race. Itís the beginning of the end; itís all been set in place. They said this day would come, and when I see the sun Ö itís the end of the line.

I now see the sun rise, this morning I pay the price.
They open up my cell door, my knees are still on the floor,
my hands are still together, itís my last day ever.

[Bridge-Speed up tempo]

I think of my daughterís face, I wonder if I still have a place,
Inside my little girlís heart, or if what I did tore us apart.
I think sheíll understand, I shot him because Iím a man.
The preacher says to forgive, but I just couldnít live,
without giving an eye for an eye, so he had to dieÖ
Jesus help me in this endeavor, I am a believer...
Then I see final flash, in this chair made of ash.
GoodbyeÖ

[Return to normal Tempo]

[Chorus] Itís the end of the line, the finish of the race. Itís the beginning of the end; itís all been set in place. They said this day would come, and when I see the sun Ö itís the end of the line.

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Old 12-17-2012, 04:33 AM   #2
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Hey,
I feel that it started off pretty good, but then I think that you were trying really hard to make things rhyme and hence make a lot of 'cliche' type moments. The constant rhyming reminded me of a lot of songs played on the modern country radios more then it did folk, which is unfortunate. I feel like I am being super harsh, and I am sorry, but it felt very run of the mill to me.
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Old 12-18-2012, 02:48 AM   #3
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Nah, you're not being that harsh man Any constructive criticism is always appreciated. I'll admit, I wrote the verse as more a poem than actual song lyrics. And my creative writing teacher from high school was big about how if the poem rhymes once, it has to rhyme EVERYWHERE. This peave has passed on to me and it shows in my writing, especially one like this that I wrote in more of a poem style format. Thanks for the advice!
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