GMx

Hey, what's up? Hope you all had a a great Christmas. Well, I finished this last night, a soung I started writting around a year ago, but didn't finish until a couple of days ago. That's a really bad habit I've got, to be honest, writting a few lines of a song and forgeting about them until years later.

Well, it's a quite simple punk-rock song, it's called Falling. You can listen to it here: http://soundcloud.com/user579804/falling (I hope it's not against the rules posting external links, if it is, I'm sorry). I did the drums with a little drum machine I found (Rhythm Pascal), and I used one of my guitars through a simulated bass amp on Studio One for the bass lines.

I lack proper recording equipment AND mixing knowledge, I just tweak things around until it sounds good to me, so it doesn't have the greatest quality, but I enjoy doing that a lot, and I hope I can learn how to do it professionally. Cheers!

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I guess I thought we’d be better off alone
But truth be told I’ve never felt so lonely
It took a word to erase the book we wrote
You know for sure how to end the story

You can’t replace a star with fireflies
Don’t say a word, ‘cause you’ll never get it right
I wanna know: were you ever happy?
We can’t replace, we can’t rebuild, we can’t return

We’re just getting old, we’re not growing
We’re not moving on, we’re just mourning
We’re not getting up, we’re just falling
We don’t love, we’re just feeling sorry

You said you loved me like a million times
But it was after guilt fell on your back
And now you’re looking for a place to hide
It won’t be long before they stab you back

The time has come for things to fall in line
And you might even get a second chance
Away from everything you left behind
The hearts you break will come to get you back

We’re just getting old, we’re not growing
We’re not moving on, we’re just mourning
We’re not getting up, we’re just falling
We don’t love, we’re just feeling sorry
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benomino324

Pretty good buddy! I'm kinda in your same boat, I lack good equipment. It's still really good though, keep up the work!

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GMx

Thanks a lot! I'm really glad you liked it.

chrisslawson

These are really good! I'd be proud if they were mine and I would be happy to show them off in my band. They go really well with the song too. Well played!

P.S - The first two verses are my favourite!;-)

GMx

Thank you! I try not to be braggy or anything, since I don't consider myself as a greeeeaat singer or guitarist, but I'm proud of what I can do. I'm starting a band, actually, but the guys don't seem to be really into it, so I took the time to make this demo for myself, because I liked how it sounded in my head.

TVDDC

It's you mixed up everything on your own. i am a acoustic singer songwriter and tbh i shouldn't download your song, but i'm really diggin' the lyrics and the fact that you've did it with lack on equipment. i even don't have equipment. i use a video camera to record my song and everything else so its less quality than yours but it's fun to do right.
good job

gorsad

I really liked it considering everything was done with a lack of equipment, really digging the tune and lyrics. I don't really have any experience with songwriting or judging songs, so I might not be the best person to take an opinion from, but still a good song.

aerosmithfan95

I really enjoyed it and it sounds great even though you were lacking equipment. My favorite lyrics are probably during the chorus.

Care to C4C? http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1580464

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krm27

First, this is better than anything I could have done. So this is from some one as a potential fan of this type of alt rock, perhaps more than a peer.

It's good in the sense I could hear it on the radio or on a Green Day / Blink 182 type CD (adding in a bit more angst / energy).

However, it would not really hook me because the chorus is too safe, too similar to the verse chords. The song stays in a pocket that it never leaves. My own taste / style is to leave the pocket to create greater tension in listener, then hopefully return to pocket in an interesting way.

I thought the vocals were pretty good, but there seems to be something a bit too restrained about your singing, for this genre. At least IMO.

I'd recommend playing around with moving out of key a bit, or changing key for chorus, or something like that, and maybe let out more emotion and be less restrained singing, then I might be more of a fan. Or maybe that stuff would not work at all, never know till you try.

~Ken