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Old 12-30-2012, 08:53 PM   #1
greyeyedfire
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Bored On My Favorite Holiday

We just laid there and watched the sky
her looking for the beauty in every star
me too scared to breathe
because it might set her off
and ruin the new year
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Old 01-02-2013, 01:51 PM   #2
seventh_angel
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It's been a while since I've read something from you. This was nice; I just think that "set her off" isn't quite what you were looking for, or at least doesn't have as much impact as it should.
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