01-08-2013, 05:59 AM
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Lets rent bikes from 1942
Join Date: May 2006
Location: In the deepest ocean, the bottom of the sea
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For the birds
shitty day. ots :/
For You, or for the Birds that don't shut up in the morning, I'm not really sure. Wake me up tomorrow the easy way, through open blinds and give me time to roll over and over until I just can't sleep any longer and I'll lie there a little more, hear the sounds of the park down the road, remember the park down the road on the last day of high school, the cops were after us that night and we just went to the park, slept in the car and woke up sweating in the rising sun, dogs barking on early morning walks while we came down dizzy, and after slurpees at gas station up the road I was good to take the car home, drop you off around the corner so you could make up a night, and nobody would know how happy we were to do nothing much at all, to climb the willow trees by the baseball fields only to climb back down, and when you wake me up tomorrow and it's all over I'll miss nobody because sometimes I don't sleep in the car, and some mornings I still don't wake up on time and I can look outside to a sunlit sky, have no idea if it's June or January, years later, have no idea what that 'later' might mean and whistle a song that reminds me of you as if you still lived down the street.
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01-08-2013, 04:26 PM
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DT's Feminist Mom
Join Date: Sep 2006
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very nice, especially on the spot - not overthought, very genuine, very sweet & sad.
jimmy you are beautiful and will find someone who makes it too easy to be yourself.
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01-15-2013, 11:59 AM
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So-Called New-Age(d) Poet
Join Date: Aug 2007
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The only thing that could be avoided is the repetition of park, but that really doesn't matter, this was good writing. Hope your days have been getting better lately Jimmy. Take care.
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