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Old 03-19-2013, 07:05 AM   #1
pixiesfanyo
the pain is easy
 
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Join Date: May 2004
Location: idyllwild, california
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recently, i was peeling back my ribs
when i came to realize
there's an obtuse shape inside of me.
a malignant growth of despair.
a predictable blemish,
for all to see.
it's like a queen of clubs
with a bent corner.

i pushed those feelings inside
striving towards
that pain ignored.
as i suffocate my weakness
patiently.
a bleakness has seemed
to surround my center.
and i lay
a deck of fifty two cards
with myself flawed so obviously.
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Old 03-22-2013, 08:38 PM   #2
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This is deep. For some reason, I am struggling to determine whether the blemish is physical or mental, but either way it really works in this poem. I love the cards metaphor! Keep it up!
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