Eccer

(and another poem, how we all miss nature eh?)

Erosion brought
Memories in a whisk
Still, it lingers
That radiance I
"Listen" it said "and

Hear thee wake of forest songs
O woodpeckers beckoning
In the early morn
Like little distress signals
Before the coming age
Make haven
For all life within
Roots
Brace self with
Trees
Rustling grace
Seek
Nature in all's splendor
Find warmth's embrace
Where you and me belong
In between
Intrinsic source"

Ocean time stirs
Into grey of
Thoughts
I used to love

What I see now
Is only a mire
Past ruptures vast fields
Where new complexes shall rise
To eradicate
By day
By night
By dawn
In the forests I walked upon

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Mr.Pink101

I read the green text in the voice of the Great Deku Tree from Ocarina of Time
This is quite a well written piece, I'm liking the subtle "concrete jungle" reference too.
A bit depressing though, can't you write about kittens? XD

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Eccer

Kittens will be considered. And thanks.

Now that I think of it, this fits perfectly with what the greaty deku tree would tell kids nowadays ^^

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doubtfulsalmon

your presentation really makes this, and overall flows gently and effortlessly.
for some reason the line intrinsic source" sticks out to me, i think it feels a bit rushed in comparison to the rest of that stanza, but that might just be me.

this feels very nostalgic to me, makes me think of when excitement with someone fades to boredom.

this was a good read

Eccer

Yeah, it feels rushed because I was supposed to have something else afterwards. But I just couldn't come up with anything that would flow and give more meaning to what was already being told. So I kinda left it alone there.

So, thanks for noticing that I'll have to see whether I will do something about it or not.

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