Tarbosh

Back again with another song I've written over the past few months. I think I started work on this one in September, but I don't even remember exactly. I came up with the first couple riffs on guitar and just got to work.

I put it away for quite a while and came back to it the past week or so and finished it up. I guess that's pretty much how I write everything ever. Start it, leave it, come back to it, finish it. But I digress.

Not exactly sure what my influences here were, I didn't really think about it as I was writing. I just kind of went with it, hopefully it's ok.

Criticisms will be returned and are of course very much appreciated!

Attached Files

Of All Losses.zip (26.4 KB, 207 views)

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Compositions:
VGM: 1 2 3
Moonlit Crossroads
Relieved of Breath
Surmounting the Gate
The Merger
Standing Before The Precipice (with RedDeath9)
Thresholds Collapse (with RedDeath9)
Baron of Fog
Garden of Sighs
Prophecy
Of All Losses

Ometh

I miss'd you brah ;_;

I shall check out this as soon as I can

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Tarbosh

I know, I've just been on such a dry spell with writing lately I haven't really been around the forums.

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Compositions:
VGM: 1 2 3
Moonlit Crossroads
Relieved of Breath
Surmounting the Gate
The Merger
Standing Before The Precipice (with RedDeath9)
Thresholds Collapse (with RedDeath9)
Baron of Fog
Garden of Sighs
Prophecy
Of All Losses

EpiExplorer

I really want to listen to it, but I r having virus scan and something is making all my downloads fail.

turbrush plz

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Tarbosh

^ It's so shitty your computer is trying to protect your ears from it.

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Compositions:
VGM: 1 2 3
Moonlit Crossroads
Relieved of Breath
Surmounting the Gate
The Merger
Standing Before The Precipice (with RedDeath9)
Thresholds Collapse (with RedDeath9)
Baron of Fog
Garden of Sighs
Prophecy
Of All Losses

guitar_jew

I dig it, for the most part, just a few mild criticisms, after my second listen through.

The first few bars sounded gross until the melody came in to give it direction. First riff is excellent, I can tell working with RedDeath has hugely influenced the way you write melodies in GP (lots of attention to detail with the bends and vibrato), or the other way around, who knows? I like, either way,

The change to the thrashy part at 57 was just off-putting, and it doesn't work for me, personally. The fusiony part before and the thrash itself are great, but they need a stronger transition, imo. Going back to the exotic fusiony sound though worked great.

88-89 and its repetitions REALLY reminded me of a motif from 'Standing Before the Precipice.' You probably know which one I'm talking about.

The acoustic bit in the middle here. Couple things. First, it feels very directionless within itself- I can't make any distinct melody out, just a bunch of sounds that are roughly in good harmony with each other. It isn't atmospheric to me, just confusing. And the sudden change to triplets at 122 was unpleasantly jarring- I think having some soft drums might give you something to smooth that out a bit with.

When the drums pick back up, the piece feels good again. The 60 bars of near-pointlessness are my big complaint for this work, really. I know you wanted to have a long bridge to space out the repetition of your previous ideas, but this one just didn't work.

C4C? http://www.ultimate-guitar.com/foru...d.php?t=1566286

I think you critted an earlier version of the first song, but the rest should be new for you, thanks!

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EpiExplorer

Damn, I see why you and RedDeath do collabs, dis is gold

I really admire you two when it comes to this sort of songwriting, my shit aint anywhere near this.

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