Illustration

Okay, so I wrote this song for my girlfriend.
She likes overly-typical Metalcore and Acoustic music, so I did my best to try and combine the two. I've been thinking about fixing it up and turning it into a decent song. Anyone think its worth it?

Happy to crit back, just leave the link.

Attached Files

newst-redo.gp5 (43.0 KB, 264 views)

Ometh

Not really. I'll explain why in a bit: I'm playing minecraft lol.

__________________

ohp-kyle

I enjoyed it. I was sort of hoping it would pick up at the end, maybe even just for a bar or two, but I do think it's decent, to say the least!

__________________
Twelve Minute Mile - Never Fast Enough to Outrun the Shame

thePTOD

I thought it was actually pretty neat. She should like it!

__________________

E-Bro with WCPhils

Illustration

I know what you mean. I literally ran out of idea's and the only thing I could think of was to fade out and leave it at that haha. The end sounded a lot more epic in my mind then it did in MIDI.



Thanks man.
Yeah she loved it, but then again she loves anything I do. Even when its terrible. Ahh the perks of having a girlfriend.

frankibo

I'm not sure you had any to start with.

__________________

Illustration

Lol'd hard frank.
Love your stuff from the collabs by the way.
If you get bored and want to crit something, I really need feedback
on the Apache cover I posted, and your opinion would be extremely valid.

xbitmetal

Plz no slap bass like this. Drums are boring, otherwise this is cool. Or not actually bar 20-onwards boring shit till acoustig guitar. And yes, very overused the last riff. However as generic it is, it's good.

No slap bass, and better drums and u have cool material.
First riff was really cool. The second was overused/generic, and could have been worked out better way.

CelestialGuitar

I actually thought this was very good, have you ever considered getting into a Metalcore band? I think you've got some great ideas, especially the synth/acoustic section in the middle, good work!

__________________
Like Celestial Wish on Facebook!
Celestial Wish on Youtube

kylendm

46-on was very I killed the prom queen. The acoustic part was pretty neat. The parts before it were indeed generic though. Still, it has potential. I sent you a PM too.

__________________

Odirunn

I think it was pretty gnarly. I recorded the first bit cuz I was bored earlier. With vocals it could totally be legit. Nicely done.

http://dl.dropbox.com/u/16210823/UG%20Stuff/tabsong.mp3

__________________
Let's party.

Illustration

Thanks man!
I used to learn a lot of prom queen when I was starting out with guitar years ago, so they were a pretty big influence on me (:
I don't think I got your PM unfortunately. It says Private messages: 0
Re-send? (:



Holy ****ing shit.
That sounds amazing man. The tone is god tier to my ears.
I didn't even know those riffs had that much potential in them!?
The stutter effect and bend in the breakdown was beautiful, so beautiful.
You beast.

I love the style you added to it as well.
Gives it such a better groove.



Thanks heaps man!
Yeah, I'm currently in a Metlacore band as the bassist/back-up Vox.
I used to be the Vocalist but I couldn't really see myself as a front man.
Here is our material I did Vocals for:

Illustration

You should have seen the drums before I fixed them up.
You would have fallen asleep to them if you find the current ones boring xD.
I getcha' man, I would never actually slap a bass for a song like this.
It was just for the tone it gives the MIDI file.
Thanks for the feedback (:

kylendm

I sent it to you through your UG profile not the forum. So click on your profile at the top andyou sshould see it there.

__________________

Dregen

that was great

__________________
japan, the woman in the black dress