Guitar0player

This is something new I am working on.

Updated, almost complete!

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Theme for a battle scene.gp5 (36.5 KB, 44 views)

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Ometh

Quite the groovy theme. I'm guessing they're fighting through the power of dance?

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Guitar0player

A dance with magnum revolvers?

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xbitmetal

Katana dance and ultimate magic powers? I dunno I loved your guitar riff 0030567 ****yeah . Brass section made this all cool, but I got to say you shouldn't have organs and brass section. Just pick one or your song is going to have too many layers.

QuantumInfinity

The riff in the beginning had me thinking about Megadeth :p

Aside from that, this shit is really catchy and the Brass is pretty sweet as well.
Can't really complain about anything here, so I'ma just pat you on the back instead ^.~

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CelestialGuitar

Hey there, I actually am into composing for games/films/products etc, so I think I can give advice. First, I think this works, I feel that this would be great in an indie RPG game as a boss theme for one particular boss, and I say that, because it's a good piece, however, I feel that it doesn't have the right atmosphere for a standard battle, and I don't think it has the right impact for a generic boss theme (you're probably aware of Those Who Fight Further, which I think has an incredible impact), I think you have the right idea when you mentioned revolvers, as I could imagine this playing as you enter a battle with a dodgy mafia boss, or something along those lines.

In the bass break from 57 onwards, I feel that there could be more, a high synth, possibly, with a better build up from the drums, into that second theme, which you should expand on, and aim to make the piece loop after expanding on it.

Once all that's done, I reckon you could happily put this in a videogame.

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Guitar0player

Thanks as usual man!



Well the organ there is almost exclusively for the solo, I just wrote this song with an organ solo in mind cos if you'll notice, it doesnt really fit as a guitar solo.



Well, I didnt have an RPG in mind or a game at all, it's supposed to be a comic/cartoon idea that I am thinking about. It's not serious at all and as you can imagine this fits it perfectly. Lots of action, bullet fire and slapstick humor.

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Jim.Halpert

So the movement between notes that you have, (melodically or harmonically, kinda a combo of both), feels so groovy like people have said. My only suggestion based on that would be to add more interesting rhythm to the riff. Don't change it much, but add some flare to really vibe with the beat and pitches that flow. Something like holding the low E for a little bit when it is just repeating the eighth note rhythm in what you have now. You get my point.

Ometh

Since I didn't give this one a proper crit lemme give it a go now. The first thing that hits me is how similar this song is to the other you posted. While that's not something bad by any means, I just expected something a bit different. The first riff is one groovy mofo. The drums feel solid, and the brass section sounds good. I dig the key change at 25, and those chords at 33 are really tasty too. The organ solo is just fantastic. The third reintro felt a bit tiring tbh, but I like the chords and overall riff idea at 65. Since this is clearly an unfinished piece I can't really complain about it, but I feel it could use a couple more riffs tbh. I also felt that with your other piece, and while both songs have great ideas on their own, running with the same idea for dozens of bars does get a little repetitive. One of the things I really liked about the organ solo is that I wasn't realy expecting it, since I was thinking it would head in the same direction as your other song. If you don't want to drastically change your songs, adding more solos, more drum fills, little different things here and there could really spice up this piece, giving it a kind of a jam feel instead of a backing track. Overall solid work. 6.5/10
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