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Old 06-11-2013, 03:15 PM   #1
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Hey guys (and girls)

I finished this just a second ago and I thought that it would be good to ask your opinions. Its a acoustic song and I've written it for my girlfriend, we have our two month anniversary this weekend. Haven't been able to come up with a title yet. Any help?



I could watch the fine lines of your face
Fill my time with memorizing all the little stains
I could lay here, next to you, all day
Just to watch you breathe and Iíd drift away

Everything outside this room is gone
The world is us, weíre all alone
Iíll cherish these moments as long as I can
Your foolish romantic: thatís what I am

And when I lay alone in my bed at night
I dream of those moments I hold you tight
I picture your face on a background of pillow
And I want you, I crave you, it canít be too soon no

Everything outside this room is gone
The world is us, weíre all alone
Iíll cherish these moments as long as I can
Your foolish romantic: thatís what I am

Could this be all that I need
Could this be all Iíll ever feel
Never have I felt this way inside
Never have I felt more alive

Everything outside this room is gone
The world is us, weíre all alone
Iíll cherish these moments as long as I can
Your foolish romantic: thatís what I am



Cheers
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Old 06-11-2013, 04:22 PM   #2
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If it's not too chessy for your taste (I know it is for mine), "Your Foolish Romantic" would be an appropriate title.
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Old 06-11-2013, 04:31 PM   #3
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See thats also my problem. I dont want something too cheesy
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Old 06-11-2013, 06:19 PM   #4
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See thats also my problem. I dont want something too cheesy
Hmm... Something not too cheesy...

You could name the song Gabe.
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Old 06-15-2013, 04:25 PM   #5
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Old 06-18-2013, 04:00 PM   #6
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I'd use "as long as I can", or "next to you" if you wanna be cheesier than that.

Congratulations on your two-months-versary anyway
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Old 06-19-2013, 10:16 AM   #7
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