|08-17-2013, 12:21 PM||#1|
Join Date: Sep 2006
I heard it, that distant
voice of many
I had no pity for, but then I
What you meant, not just
for yourself. But the
reason, did it have any a reason?
Enough to make yourself question
if a godless was in front of thee?
Maybe I was you?
Maybe it was?
Or just a resemblance, of
Did it startle you
Did I meet you with empty
Just to provoke what
answers thought of faith
Am I xeno-
when we face?
Standing in that room, a moment
was not just me and you, but every other.
Remember how it started?
You did not ask it first, you
did not confront with.
One which is likely the same
question, but you and I
just wont see it
But I do, I see a god and a
man just like the many of thousands before.
I see devotion to a cause of greater good
I see complete sympathy for the world you "just" made
I see rationality just like any other
I see a wreath and a suit of him almighty
I see, myself fumbling with these words
But what I never really saw, was
Last edited by Eccer : 11-13-2013 at 07:58 PM.
|08-24-2013, 07:11 AM||#2|
Join Date: Jul 2006
I enjoyed this, good job mate It's well written, quite cryptic. But it's not like cheesy or cliche with the vocabulary and structure; something I believe happens too often these days.
I couldn't exactly decipher the subject matter though. Maybe some kind of event happened between two people that made one of them start believing in a god? Or maybe that is a metaphor for something, I can't tell. I'm no good with things like this
Thanks again for your feedback over at my thread