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Old 09-25-2013, 07:08 PM   #1
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overgrown zit

how do you push it out?






often,
I imagine grabbing you by the temples
and popping your shame
like an overgrown zit,
your veins left indented
on your bald head...


just wait as the throbbing resides.

















where do you go when the ghost commands you to stop hiding?



away?

where the fuck have you been, anyway?
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Old 09-28-2013, 07:18 AM   #2
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i've always known you were brilliant at spacing, but when i read those last three three lines in succession as i scrolled down the page, it was revelatory.

well done, saadia. that last line sticks
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Old 09-28-2013, 04:30 PM   #3
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there's nothing helpful i can say about this, it's just really really good.
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Old 09-29-2013, 02:58 PM   #4
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Thank you so much. Thank you.

It is awesome that you guys still read me. It has been so difficult to write lately.
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Old 09-29-2013, 11:19 PM   #5
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You've had better. I like you when you're not so obvious.
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Old 09-30-2013, 09:59 AM   #6
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Very good The spacing actually made this a better piece.
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Old 10-04-2013, 01:53 PM   #7
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