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Old 05-20-2014, 07:50 AM   #1
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Sisyphus potential recompense still martyrless, within conservation; the stranglehold maneuvers, mercilessly. Expect no one, when a voice calls your name, like a downward spiral/the stargazers come. “I am not home”.
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Old 05-20-2014, 08:11 AM   #2
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Old 05-20-2014, 08:23 AM   #3
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Old 05-20-2014, 09:00 AM   #4
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Old 05-20-2014, 09:48 AM   #5
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this is marvellous. the word choice and arc are impeccably placed. i love "the stargazers come". some of these phrases just sound amazing. i would offer that "expect no one / when / a / voice /calls" could use some sort of punctuation to separate it more from the rest of the poem and add to the voice, but you really already have quite the work here. this is probably my favorite i've read from you recently. thanks for the post.
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Old 05-22-2014, 04:24 AM   #6
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Good work man, I really enjoyed this. The placement and everything works really great, I love how you rhyme in the end. Maybe you should have some punctuation in the spaced out stanza, but it works without it too :-) feels!
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Old 05-22-2014, 09:42 PM   #7
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Old 05-24-2014, 01:40 PM   #8
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I love the brevity, it could have been easy to drag this out but it's incredibly effective this way. Really enjoyed this.
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Old 06-03-2014, 10:13 PM   #9
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Old 06-04-2014, 10:16 PM   #10
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