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Old 12-08-2005, 07:13 PM   #21
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Location: Who has never killed an hour? Not casually or without thought, but carefully: a premeditated murder of minutes. The violence comes from a combination of giving up, not caring, and a resignation that getting past it is all you can hope to accomplish.
I Agree.
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Old 12-08-2005, 08:53 PM   #22
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im liking this....lots of big words and a lot of cool imagery

"Stars are only lightbulbs that need changing every month"

i LOVE that line

keep it up dude
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Old 12-08-2005, 08:59 PM   #23
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Wow, I agree with Robert SMith, this is probably one of the worst pieces of **** I've ever read in my life. Maybe if you'd kill yourself you'd have something more interesting to say!
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Old 12-08-2005, 09:24 PM   #24
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^ ignore this guy
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Old 12-09-2005, 02:07 PM   #25
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Location: Who has never killed an hour? Not casually or without thought, but carefully: a premeditated murder of minutes. The violence comes from a combination of giving up, not caring, and a resignation that getting past it is all you can hope to accomplish.
Thanks Robert, appreciate the comment
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Old 12-09-2005, 02:12 PM   #26
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Old 12-09-2005, 02:46 PM   #27
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Old 03-22-2006, 06:17 PM   #28
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i really enjoyed this piece. you are definatly one of the best writers on here. but i think the chorus could of been a lot better if worked on, it just wasn't as great as the rest of the song, don't get me wrong, it was good but not at the same standard.
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Old 10-17-2006, 12:14 PM   #29
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First of all thanks for the crit. I really enjoyed reading this piece. It was very heavy on imagery and I liked that. It painted a vivid picture in my head. Like I said, ther language was great and the flow was good as well. I really don't have anything wrong to say about this piece. Anyways, nice job and keep up the great work.
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