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Old 01-31-2010, 06:17 PM   #1
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sir saint Patrick iii

"sir saint Patrick iii (final)
or the tale of Charlie and Saratoga i"

a winter's tale approaches:
the tale of charlie and saratoga,
and should this story have its beginnings
in the basement of my house,
i only ask for the blessing of sir saint patrick,
to guide me and provide me
with the love for them that i had
for no one else.
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Old 01-31-2010, 06:46 PM   #2
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At first read, this felt really "empty". I'll be back, I hope.
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Old 01-31-2010, 06:53 PM   #3
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it's beautiful
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Old 01-31-2010, 07:34 PM   #4
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this really made me sad.

it's extremely courageous in what it is. Friendship apart, I've been often intrigued by your understanding of poetics and wondered how it could come just form reading pieces being posted on here. even the rare gem that you would produce and post up sporadically didn't make me realize how much of a poet you really are. the fact that you always claim not to be one pushed in the same direction.

but this wasn't written by you. it was written by dozens of poets, published and unpublished, you, them, me, that I read every day, we all wrote this piece without noticing and encountering it today made me realize how much more you've got in you than you'll ever admit. it also made me realize what we all lack. a part of it anyway.

I hope you find the strength, both poetically and in reality.

tty soon anyway.
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Old 02-01-2010, 01:23 AM   #5
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wow.
id like to say more but it would be a waste.
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Old 09-29-2014, 01:24 PM   #6
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This made me feel really jealous I truly adore it, not as much as a poem, but as a story I would like to hear from the beginning to the end
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Old 09-29-2014, 01:48 PM   #7
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the line "in the basement of my house" doesn't seem necessary. it is a nice image, but what surrounds it is so direct and poignant and strong that it feels out of place.

glad i read this. thanks for writing it. hope things are OK.
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Old Yesterday, 01:58 AM   #8
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Always glad to be reminded of this one. And of mats comments. Both beautiful and resonant. Especially the poem.
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