#1
Hey guys. So, I've written a new song and I think it's pretty kickass.

There's a couple sections I'm not sure of, first is when the octave melody comes in on bar 97. I feel like it goes on for a bit too long without variation, but I'd like a second (or third) opinion before I change it.

Secondly, I'm not sure about the last bar of the solo, I think having the 8th notes in takes away from it's speed, but it needs to slow down anyway for the next section.

Anyway, I'd love your opinions, and will obviously crit your tracks in return.
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Metal Song.gp5
Metal Song.gpx
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Last edited by GazzaCee at Oct 31, 2012,
#2
Quite good/10: I liked it apart from the bridge riff (EDIT: at 61-64), which was a bit lifeless and I reckon you could do a lot more with it. Killer solo and also that riff at bar 129! that was awesome but only gets played once! Otherwise nice work, reminded me of Trivium
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Last edited by ste@mPunK at Oct 31, 2012,
#3
Thanks, man!

I get what you mean about that lifeless part, I put a variation of that riff from bar 129 in there to spice it up a bit.

I'm glad you like the solo, and thanks for that Trivium comparison, one of my favourite bands!

EDIT: I've updated the OP with the new version.
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#4
Pretty generic but not bad. gonna review this later.
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#5
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Pretty generic but not bad. gonna review this later.

In what way is it generic?
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#6
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In what way is it generic?

The riffs themselves are, pretty much. It sounds like one of your first songs: am I correct? If that's the case, don't worry too much.
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#7
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The riffs themselves are, pretty much. It sounds like one of your first songs: am I correct? If that's the case, don't worry too much.


Otherwise, you're screwed..
#8
And you better start doing mainstream pop music. Yeah, well about the song itself.

I'm not gonna crit the song for one reason, and that is ****ed up mixing. Can't hear any other instrument than ****ing drums. (using midi gp5.)

Anyway what I saw from ur writing I couldn't see anything bad, seemed (SEEMED) like an solid generic metal song.
#9
Yeah, it one of my first songs.

It can only get better from here, right?

Right?

And sorry about the mix, but it sounds fine to me.
Your flesh means more than you.
No profit...
For once no profit...


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#10
Quote by GazzaCee
Yeah, it one of my first songs.

It can only get better from here, right?

Right?

And sorry about the mix, but it sounds fine to me.


Of course it will get better! You improve all the time, just keep at it!
#11
Quote by xbitmetal
And you better start doing mainstream pop music. Yeah, well about the song itself.

I'm not gonna crit the song for one reason, and that is ****ed up mixing. Can't hear any other instrument than ****ing drums. (using midi gp5.)

Anyway what I saw from ur writing I couldn't see anything bad, seemed (SEEMED) like an solid generic metal song.


Yeah I had to turn the guitars up too, it is a metal song after all
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