Namaste196
Banned
Join date: Dec 2010
150 IQ
#1
Hi UGers,

This is just a riff I recently came up with, which is quite fast but simultaneously chilled out.

I've got a bridge part in there as well as some variations on the riff, but otherwise I'm a bit stuck.

Would much appreciate any suggestions on how to proceed from this stage of songwriting, as well as general criticism of my composition itself.

Will give criticism in exchange for criticism. Thanks!
Attachments:
Not Sure Where To Go With This.gpx
EpiExplorer
orsonfacenospace
Join date: May 2008
5,421 IQ
#2
Import it to another file type (gp5, gp4) and then we'd be able to crit it.
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amonamarthmetal
Registered User
Join date: Aug 2008
1,808 IQ
#3
I don't have GP6...
Gear:
Dean RC7X (Bareknuckle Coldsweat pickups)
Ibanez Rg2570Z (Bareknuckle Juggernaughts)
Schecter KM-6
Schecter Hellraiser Hybrid 7 String
Engl Powerball II
Orange PPC412
Line 6 Pod HD500X
amonamarthmetal
Registered User
Join date: Aug 2008
1,808 IQ
#5
Quite an interesting piece. all i could say is add a solo. or another part with a strong melody. it sounds nice though
Gear:
Dean RC7X (Bareknuckle Coldsweat pickups)
Ibanez Rg2570Z (Bareknuckle Juggernaughts)
Schecter KM-6
Schecter Hellraiser Hybrid 7 String
Engl Powerball II
Orange PPC412
Line 6 Pod HD500X
Namaste196
Banned
Join date: Dec 2010
150 IQ
#7
Do you think a key change would help, or is the piece too short, as it stands?
SoulShredder
Registered User
Join date: Sep 2011
514 IQ
#8
You have a build up of tension working towards bar 13. Instead of repeating that main riff go into something big, that seems like a logical progression. Repeating the main riff again just gets too repetitive.
Gageycakes
Registered User
Join date: Apr 2011
56 IQ
#9
Obviously the main riff will be the returning point of the song if it goes further but it does need a variation of some sort. I also think an extra guitar or something will do wonders for this especially at the 10th bar. Even introduce it there.

Apart from that I can't say much more except I like the riff. Nice and original.

C4C?
https://www.ultimate-guitar.com/forum/showthread.php?t=1572547