#1
The feelings forever stay.
They are dead memories.
I thought about leaving it all behind.
To forget it, erase it.
Maybe I won't, maybe I may.
The feelings forever stay.
Maybe I will be only be a memory,
I'll go to sleep, so they finally will stop stabbing, you see,
The dead memories are haunting me.

You will probably hear a whisper, from the tree, of
a twinned noose of agony.
We will be sharing our own dead memory, after these years I hope you still will love me.
Count the days, light the candle, count the days they I have been away.
Dissonance is underrated.
#2
I like this piece. Though I'd suggest maybe changing the second line to just 'Dead memories'.
Also on the last line 'count the days they I have been away.', I'm assuming that's a typo and should be 'that'?

Nice one though.
It didn't take long to realise
The safest place was not her arms, but her eyes
Where she can't see you
For her gaze, it blisters;
Grey skin to cinders
#3
Quote by 剣 斧 血
I like this piece. Though I'd suggest maybe changing the second line to just 'Dead memories'.
Also on the last line 'count the days they I have been away.', I'm assuming that's a typo and should be 'that'?

Nice one though.

Thanks!
That "they" is of course a typo.
It sounds a little bit better, but I feel like it takes away the meaning a little bit.
Thank you none the less.
Dissonance is underrated.
#5
Quote by lillianyang
Such a good writing, or by I saw for the first time.Good point. Thank you for sharing

Thank you
Dissonance is underrated.