t0mm1_
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Join date: Nov 2010
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#1
I was bored yesterday so i started to write this song. It's not ready yet. So tell me what you think And C4C


EDIT: I added couple new riffs. I'm not sure if they fit into the context They are kinda weird. But give your opinions
Attachments:
new.gp5
newV2.gp5
Last edited by t0mm1_ at Dec 2, 2012,
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#2
Pretty decent actually, first riff has an interesting chord in it. Needs bass though.
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#3
24th and 25th bar sounds like Tool's Lateralus ripoff.
I like the rest of the song.
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#5
This demands bass guitar! I could do bass tracks for u if u want, im damn bored
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#7
Digging the heavy bits.....intro was kinda creepy, works well, but feels kinda barebones? I can imagine some drone chords/ambient-y sounds there.....
Needs bass as previously mentioned

AND double bass......a few 16th note triplets here and there would spice it up nicely.

The later bits have a really swell groove to them. Maybe add some ambient bits, like after the chorus in Old Days Born Anew by Textures? A lead line would work well towards the end as well.
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#8
Small bass ideas here
Attachments:
newV2+bass.gp5
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#10
sure, if you like them
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