edmodo23
Banned
Join date: Sep 2012
620 IQ
#1
I wrote this song for my post-hardcore band "A Scarlett Goodbye", its about a girl, so enjoy..

As I slash my wrists, the blood squirts in my eyes
All because she said goodbye
I cut my throat, and say so long
You'll all be sorry when I'm gone

And now it's all gonna end
My knife is my only friend
And I know what I'll do to you with this knife
But first I'll do whats right, cuz thats my life

This is the last you'll hear from me
You'll find me in my room bleeding violently

So take this knive and cut my throat into pieces
As her tears run dry and freeze like snow
The darkness surrounds me, I start to fall
But I can't see where I'm going
**** me

I cant believe what she did to me that stupid bitch
I'll slash my wrists and cut them into pieces as the blood squirts in my mouth
And I feel the pain, and feel the strain
As I look at our photos and let the memories roll

And now I cant stop crying
I think I'm dying (X8)

So take this knive and cut my throat into pieces
As her tears run dry and freeze like snow
The darkness surrounds me, I start to fall
But I can't see where I'm going
**** me

I cant stop slitting my body
I walk outside and the blood freezes
I collapse and say goodbye
As I close my eyes for the last time..
MH400
Banned
Join date: Mar 2008
8,793 IQ
#4
Quote by W4RP1G
I remember when I was 15...



I came here to post that.


Cliche. So cliche that it hurts to read.

Mate, when you hit 18, you'll look back at this and laugh. I've done the exact same thing - wrote songs like this at your age and thought they were awesome. So has everyone else. Trust me, you will look back and think "What the hell "

But yeah, as for crit? Typical early teen "I'm so dark" etc etc.
zgr0826
UG's Cowardly Bassist
Join date: Dec 2007
904 IQ
#5
Quote by MH400
I came here to post that.


Cliche. So cliche that it hurts to read.

Mate, when you hit 18, you'll look back at this and laugh. I've done the exact same thing - wrote songs like this at your age and thought they were awesome. So has everyone else. Trust me, you will look back and think "What the hell "

But yeah, as for crit? Typical early teen "I'm so dark" etc etc.



Everything this man said.
I Like St. Anger, So What?

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#1 synth
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Join date: Mar 2006
7,350 IQ
#6
poem experiment:
take one image, even one in this, and write a song/poem solely about that image. describe it. whose around, what are the senses picking up, etc.

then come back to this and see if you can plug that kind of singular wholeness and narrative into it.
synestershadows
UG's Misery Signals Fan
Join date: Jun 2007
2,568 IQ
#7
Call me Andrew!

Check Out My Band
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macaroni
UG's Colourblind Guy
Join date: Sep 2007
750 IQ
#10
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Sincerely,
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JimiJamesThe2nd
Registered User
Join date: Jan 2012
175 IQ
#11
It's typical teenage whinery.

You should definitely pursue it, though. Make the ever loving shit out of that whiney song. Write three dozen more after that, too. It's necessary for your development as a writer. We all had a phase like that, for the most part.

Gun for it, homeboy.
Last edited by JimiJamesThe2nd at Dec 9, 2012,
21wickwing
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Join date: Feb 2009
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#17
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T00DEEPBLUE
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Join date: Oct 2010
2,245 IQ
#18
Necro'd because hilarious troll.
Regarding the furry fandom from the man himself:
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