#1
Hey. Just wrote this. Talks about my feelings of being the weird guy (hence the song title, look the word up!).

Adiaphorous, the Diswired

I participate in neither stream of consciousness
Both extremities avoided
My brain is a crypt waiting to be untangled

An indifferent human
Others fathom simplicity
I visualize life
Yet I’m beleaguered because of this
The pariah, tarnished by my peers

Total exasperation over the grind of existence
Consummating the fact
Of inevitable annihilation by
My mishaps

A wired mind, never
Cables strangulated across the center neuron system
Inevitable dislodging
Some in place, others not, a few in dissimilar areas

An indifferent individual
Others grasp simplicity
I visualize life
Yet I’m fraught because of this
The recluse, marked by my peers

Adiaphorous, the diswired being
Total vexation over the grind of survival

LET IT GO!
#2
Ibanez, usually, although I'm getting a Schecter for Christmas...

With this kind of stuff, i tend to be a bit more cryptic with words...I broke out the thesaurus becasue of this..

Oh, and thanks for commenting!!!
#4
If your wondering, Aidaphorous means "Odd" or "Not the same". It's basically about my lack of social interaction and my more mature personality, how i feel like my school peers shun me, and my oddly wired mind.
#5
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#7
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If your wondering, Aidaphorous means "Odd" or "Not the same". It's basically about my lack of social interaction and my more mature personality, how i feel like my school peers shun me, and my oddly wired mind.


Ah well, just one more read. And it made perfect sense now. Cool title and a good usage of words
#8
I thought it was good... Not amazing but solid. My main complaints are about the lines "total exasperation about the grind of existence" and "total vexation about the grind of survival". There was nothing technically wrong with them, I just didn't care for them and to be honest they rather ruined the flow of the song for me. They felt thrown in and almost like filler to me. Overall though the piece was nice. I liked the wordings and the fact that you didn't settle for humdrum vocabulary like a lot of people. If you don't mind, I have a few links in my sig for my work. Maybe when you have time?
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#9
I'll be glad to read them!
And btw, the lines I put in to describe my inner feelings about my tiredness over the same routine. EVERY FLIPPIN DAY. It gets tiresome.
Otherwise, thank you!