I realize I might not have put this in the correct forum, but I'm in a rush.

Could someone take the time to read a few of my articles and tell me what it is that makes most people dislike my writing style? (I know where I went wrong in "Bands Overstaying Their Welcome", so ignore that one). I would just like to improve my writing skills.

Just bear in mind that I'm 17 and I live in South Africa, so by nature our vocab / general english skills are slightly slanted.

Thanks a lot
Also, ignore Hip-Hop vs Rock. I wrote about modern-day rap but I accidentally called it hip-hop.